GRE sample issue pool essay topic 54
Many important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker contends that most of the discoveries or creations made are accidental. I concede that if we retrospect to our history, there are some innovations which was made accidently. In most respect, however, creations or discoveries are planned and most of the time premeditated unconsciously.
Admittedly, if we look back in the scientific development timeline, we can find many examples where even astute did not get results of their hypothesis as expected. For instance, Madame Curie, who is first women to win noble prize, discovered radiation by accident when she was working to find properties of uranium. Moreover, she was keen into understanding the properties of uranium that she did not stipulate that uranium can produce radiation and that radiation can be used to treat a disease. To add, Newton, who is one of the father of physics, has discovered many theories by accident - a apple fell on his head which made him wonder about the reason behind it and in no time he came to a conclusion that there is a force- “gravitation”- which was pulling that apple towards the ground. Thus, the speaker claim has some merit that many discoveries are by accident.
However, speaker overlooks several illustrations in the real world which concludes discoveries are not totally accidental. To discover or create something, it is crucial for a scientist or an engineer to closely understand the topic so that they can work on it. While working on it they tend to understand the problem in details which leads to a better solution than preplanned one. For instance, NASA , while developing a artificial intelligence, started project with a small box which could be programmed by the engineers. Eventually that program evolved overtime to a artificial intelligence robot which looks exactly like humans. Over the time, engineers worked and saw potential to a better option which led to a innovative creation. Also, there are architects, who start their projects from rudimentary state, use their skills and transform a simple art into a complex one. They do it in a step by step method which, although not pre-planned, is somewhere premeditated by them unconsciously. Therefore, creation is a process of developing from rudimentary stage to a more developed stage.
The speaker also ignores the scientific discoveries which were made pre-planned by scientist to fight with many pandemics. For example, in 2020, corona virus outbreak had become macabre caused by those novel virus. To attenuate those effect, scientist worked persistently to find out a vaccine as well as cure. It has been two years now, scientist are able to discover many aspects of that virus which has helped in easing the process of treatment. Those discoveries made by scientist are done with full proof plan. There are various other discoveries made by humans which were planned beforehand.
In sum, the statement correctly suggests that discoveries or creation are made by accidents where even the discoverer is not aware of what the results will be. However, statement does not fully credit those discoveries or creation which are made as demanded by the scenario. Therefore, both angles of the statement is correct in itself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 594, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... discovered many theories by accident - a apple fell on his head which made him w...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the topic so that they can work on it. While working on it they tend to understand t...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... than preplanned one. For instance, NASA , while developing a artificial intellige...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... For instance, NASA , while developing a artificial intelligence, started projec...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tually that program evolved overtime to a artificial intelligence robot which loo...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tential to a better option which led to a innovative creation. Also, there are ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 31.0 11.3162921348 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15325670498 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97224109389 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521072796935 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1838364102 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.461538462 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34615384615 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172652348894 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514150258553 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346430878922 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967893756702 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185569861275 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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