In human history, there have been many great people that made a difference to the course of our society. How could the greatness of an individual be decided? Some hold the view that it is only those who live after the individual that can determine his or her greatness, which I can only partially agree with. In my opinion, the greatness of individuals can be decided by not only those who live after them but also their peers living coevally.
To start with, it should be acknowledged that one’s greatness can for sure be decided by those who live after them. Some may even argue that evaluations coming from those living afterward will be better for two reasons. Firstly, connections with and influences by the individual could render an assessment from the individual’s contemporaries on his or her greatness largely biased. Secondly, it is possible that one’s achievements are well ahead of the time and can hardly be appreciated by the contemporaries. For example, van Gogh is often viewed by people today as one of the most genius painters in the 19th century for his audacious use of color and impressive presentation of time and space, best exemplified by his masterpiece Starry Night. However, the greatness of van Gogh, which is now almost taken for granted, was not immediately appreciated by critics of his time. Instead, throughout van Gogh’s life, he was not even considered as a great painter at all for his outlandish style that was not aligned with the mainstream orthodox painting doctrines.
The case above cites van Gogh and his artwork to demonstrates that those who live after an individual may provide a better assessment on the individual’s greatness. In this case, it is van Gogh’s vision and techniques ahead of his time that made his contemporaries unable to discover his greatness. While this is the case for van Gogh, one cannot extrapolate and claim that the greatness of an individual can only be evaluated by future generations and cannot be decided by those who live at the same time. In fact, some people are instantly famous for their visible contributions to society and their greatness can and has been indeed recognized by the public fairly quickly. An example here is Dr. Nanshan Zhong, an epidemiologist and expert on infectious respiratory diseases in China, who led the battle against the COVID-19 pandemic earlier this year. Despite his age and prominent status, Dr. Zhong volunteered to the front line in the city of Wuhan where the coronavirus outbreak was first publicly identified. It was also Dr. Zhong who alerted the nation about the gravity of the situation and convinced the public to take appropriate measures against the disease. His bravery and professionalism have since then been widely recognized and revered, and undoubtedly Dr.Zhong’s greatness has been firmly established.
To wrap up, I concede to the point that an individual’s greatness sometimes needs future generations to more objectively determine, as the case of van Gogh demonstrates. However, extrapolating to the extent that one’s greatness can only be decided by those who live afterward is an over-statement. Indeed, our society today has witnessed many great individuals whose greatness has been readily established by their outstanding contributions to the society that have already shown their positive effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1276, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Zhong
...ognized and revered, and undoubtedly Dr.Zhong’s greatness has been firmly established...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, in fact, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2814.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 546.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15384615385 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00575063698 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478021978022 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 882.0 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2378843753 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.909090909 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298591016759 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108063656134 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992320771817 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227212735311 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823412650662 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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