What is the best way to cultivate one's leadership? Some may hold that instill in young people a concept of cooperation is the best way. However, from my perspective, no matter in government, industry, or any other field, a sense of competition is also critical.
To begin with, cooperation indeed benefits one's leadership. When conducting group work, admittedly, the ability to cooperate helps to enclose the relationship between group members, and thereby improves the efficiency of working. As a result, the member who has such an ability could be the leader of the group naturally. For example, the general of a troop, without consideration for soldiers' life, blindly command his subordinates to run to the deadly frontline and charge into battle, while concealing himself in a solid bunker. He will definitely defame among the troop, and soon lost his leadership. Therefore, cooperating contributes to leadership.
On the top of that, except for cooperation, competition is essential as well. By simply cooperating, group members' potential may hardly be activated. Who has a sense of competition and is able to outweigh others, providing the largest contribution to the group is eligible to lead the group. Besides, a successful leader should be able to direct his group members to excess other groups in the competition between groups. At this time, the ability of competition is crucial. For instance, the coach of a football team must teach his team players aggressive strategies to defeat opponents and win the game. Despite the cooperation still undeniable, the key to winning is competition against opponents. Hence, to be the leader of a group, the sense of competition is quite critical.
In conclusion, although the ability to cooperate is an important dimension of leadership, the sense of competition is also significant when we lead a group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: holds
... to cultivate ones leadership? Some may hold that instill in young people a concept ...
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...begin with, cooperation indeed benefits ones leadership. When conducting group work,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, except for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 298.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26510067114 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09575171212 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5987944807 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1666666667 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5555555556 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.21951772744 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189046544188 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658439766877 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468528535635 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130375772072 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581349059405 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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