Recently, there is a wide discussion about whether the local communities should depend on local volunteers. Some may holds that citizens should participate in those projects benefiting the communities. However, from my perspective, it is more practical to handle such projects for skilled and specific community leaders.
To begin with, theoretically, it is true that citizen volunteers are the suitable people who should contribute to local communities. In other word, the community projects always aim to improve the living standard of citizens. So they should be highly motivated and responsible for these projects. For instance, a sport league provides a platform for youth to do physical exercise. Citizens are able to hang out and play football together by such a platform. As a result, they are likely to join in the organizing of the league. Hence, local citizens are indeed ideal candidates for projects in local communities in theory.
Furthermore, despite volunteers are enthusiastic, professional community leader with skills and time may actually better choice. To be more specific, the residents may be various in different areas. In those communities established recently, most of its residents may be young people, who are active but often have to focus on their own works as the increasing workload among whole society. While they are willing to contribute to the projects, they simply do not have so much spare time. On the contrary, there might be more elder people in conventional areas. Elder people could be less interested in thing which young people like, such as sport. In this case, organizing a sport league for young people living in such areas may lost public support. In addition, collecting donations for charity may attract lots of attention from elders. But collecting donations is not an easy job. It requires precise counting of donations, which will be challenging for elders themselves. In these cases, professional community leaders provide a more effective and efficient way to handle the projects. Therefore, we should employ an expert to deal with them.
In conclusion, although citizens seem proper candidates for community projects, professional leaders are more practical solutions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 521, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'elder' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: elder
...e time. On the contrary, there might be more elder people in conventional areas. Elder peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38968481375 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92189439434 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553008595989 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.382252804 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.7826086957 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1739130435 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13043478261 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371397078369 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100953403963 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798664161889 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248258489144 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931896046469 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.39 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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