In the augument, the author attributes fewer people watched Super Screen-produced movies to the lack of publiuc awareness, and suggests to allocate more budget on advertising. However, some questions should be addressed before the author proves the validity of the augument.
To begin with, the author assumes that the decline of number of people attended movies is a consequence of movie production company itself. However, some questions should be address to substantiate this argument. Is the context of the whole industry become demoral? Due to the pandemic, countless people lose their jobs. Unemployed people are worry about how to sustain their life without income, so spend money on entertainment could sharply decline. In addition, is there any other
form of entertainment has thrived recently? As the development of Internet industrial, people more and more enjoy watch short videos on their mobile phones instead of going to cinema. For instance, Tiktok attracks million of teenagers, and even be discribed as super addictive. Within these conditions, the need of movies would be reduced. Therefore, answering the the aforementioned questions might more defensibly reinforce the conclusion and the whole argument.
Furthermore, although the social environment remain consistent, can reviewers represent the public? As reviewers are professional, comparing to public, they may focus more on the narrative techniques used in the movies. But most of people who cannot understand such complicated techniques pay more attention to the story itself. As a result, the reviewers and other audiances may have completly different criteria to movies. In this case, despite the advertisment reaching the public, the outcome could be the same. Hence, answering this question could enhence the argument.
Although the conclusion that increasing of advertising will benefit the cinema is comprehensible, some questions should be addressed before the author validates the argument. Had the author delivered more answer to the questions, the conclusion and the argument might be more defensible.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1729 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.489 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.87 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.309 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.452 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests allocating'.
Suggestion: suggests allocating
...s to the lack of publiuc awareness, and suggests to allocate more budget on advertising. However, so...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'addressed'?
Suggestion: addressed
...self. However, some questions should be address to substantiate this argument. Is the c...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 362, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... would be reduced. Therefore, answering the the aforementioned questions might more def...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 362, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... would be reduced. Therefore, answering the the aforementioned questions might more def...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 225, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...tive techniques used in the movies. But most of people who cannot understand such complicated ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66984126984 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99088394079 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568253968254 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4970421303 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114901655996 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339773756301 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553191425827 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0698300210529 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509962127738 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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