Increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in the society, especially among children, while others believe that children behavior gets influenced from peer groups and parents.
Violence is an enormous issue all over the world, and the impact of violence on young minds is increasing at an alarming rate. The argument claims that some people believe increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in the society, especially among children, while others believe that children behavior gets influenced from peer groups and parents. I generally believe that children mostly learn from their parents and peers and hence their behavior gets molded according to what they observe and learn.
To begin, a child since his or her birth is closely associated with his or her parents, observe their actions, try to understand them and then try to imitate the same because they understand that it is the right way of doing things. For example, if a child sees his or her father physically abusing his or her mother every day, then after some days he or she will assume that it is normal and at times might try to implement the same on others, like beating up other friends when for some reason they do not agree with each other. Now, clearly, from this example, we can see that parental behavior in front of a child plays a major role in influencing the child's behavior.
Furthermore, at school, many a time, we find children getting bullied. Children with superior physical strength usually harass other children whom they feel inferior to them. Now, in these cases, we observe that both the children's behavior gets impacted enormously. The child who gets bullied becomes resistant and hesitant to talk to his or her peers and the child who is the bully practices the same with other kids as well whom they feel inferior. Thus, in this way, we can understand that a child's behavior can get affected to a large extent depending on the role he or she is playing.
Some people might argue that violence in media for example action movies can cause an immense effect on a child' behavior. Although it cannot be denied entirely, it is also true that parents can oversee what their child watches on computer or television. If they find it inappropriate for their child, they should stop them from watching the same. In this way, they can help the child from not seeing this violence in the media and at the same time, might encourage them to watch something suitable for their age.
In conclusion, it is quite obvious that since children watch his or her parents very closely from the time of their birth, as well as, starts making friends starting from their school till college, hence their behavior also gets influenced depending on what they see and learn.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...atch something suitable for their age. In conclusion, it is quite obvious that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77555555556 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35163300236 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475555555556 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5713609126 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.3125 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346238556051 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135160108006 0.0831039109588 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197711977421 0.0758088955206 261% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220497888853 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.225892622854 0.0667264976115 339% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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