"Instead of requiring students to take courses in a variety of disciplines-that is, courses ranging from the arts and the humanities to the physical and biological sciences-colleges and universities should allow students to enroll only in those courses that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields. Such concentration is necessary in today's increasingly work-oriented society."
students are exposed to all subjects in their years at school. this is done primarily to provide the students with the basic knowledge about all the subject areas. school students get ample time to assess their aptitude for a particular subject and they are able to identify the career that they would like to pursue depending on their abilities and choice. therefore, there is no apparent requirement for these students to take courses in a variety of disciplines when they are in college. it would be a much better option if they are allowed to enroll for only those courses that will train them for their choice of careers.
Today there is cut throat competition for gaining a foothold in any career. there are a number of lucrative jobs that are held in high regard by students and these students wish to be well trained in order to succeed in the career of their choice. Since there are a large number of applicants for a promising job, the companies need an evaluation system by which they can separate the well qualified applicants from the ones who are not suitable for the job. this is where it becomes necessary to be specifically qualified for that particular job rather than having some knowledge about the job requirements along with knowledge on other subjects that are not related to the job. everyone is out to prove that he is the best and the companies are hiring only those who are able to provide some form of certification for proving their worth. this certification may be in the form of a degree from a reputed institute or in the form of a certificate awarded by an institute after passing their certification tests. A student has to be well prepared for all the tests that he may have to appear for before he can succeed in the career of his choice.
For instance, consider a student who is keen on becoming a computer professional. he may have to acquire certifications from Microsoft, CISCO or some other reputed institutions as added qualifications. such certified professionals are more likely to succeed in getting a good job as compared to those who are not certified. this is because companies give preference to certified professionals when it comes to hiring suitable candidates for a job. it would be a total waste of time and effort for such a student if he has to spend precious time during his college days studying subjects that are not going to help him in any way for his preparation for the certification tests. Contrast this scenario with a case wherein a student is allowed to enroll for a course that not only trains him for a career in computers, but also prepares him for the certification tests. it is obvious that the second student stands a much better chance of succeeding in his life and career as opposed to the first student who spent most of his college days studying subjects that were not even remotely related to computers.
if you are the recruitment officer of a vehicle repair company which is hiring mechanics, would you just pick up any college graduate or would you go in for a candidate who has done a specialized course in vehicle mechanics and is an ASE (national institute for Automotive Service Excellence) certified vehicle mechanic? The answer is evident. there is no way that you would select a candidate who has probably studied vehicle mechanics as one subject. it is obvious that the second candidate is a better choice. colleges and universities have the responsibility of grooming the citizens of the country in such a way that they are able to create not only employment for everyone, but also provide well qualified and trained personnel to the industry. therefore, in the interest of the nation, it is necessary that students be given the option of enrolling only for those courses which will help them in their choice of career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.5258426966 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.3162921348 247% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3166.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 663.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77526395173 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07432619952 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74997825858 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396681749623 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1028.7 704.065955056 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3712104686 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.64 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.52 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164854833569 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572664962435 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596374187532 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122496355635 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466999350536 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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