An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Malnutrition is a severe condition observed in poverty stricken countries. this includes inadequate diet content which results in people suffering from deficiency of vitamins and minerals.Such a condition is prevalent in the impoverished nation of Tagus.In this country deficiency of vitamin A is observed amongst majority of the population.The deficiency of vitamin A impairs the immunity of the person affected and causes typical ocular defects including impaired vision and night blindness.
To tackle this malign issue , an international development organization have engineered a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A.Manufacturing these genetically enhanced seeds is very costly.Even if the farmers are offered subsidies for the purchase of these seeds , its not exactly clear who will be providing these subsidies.The country of Tagus is already low on its economy and providing benefits to farmers in such case could worsen their economy.
Though millet is the staple food for the people of the country , it does not mean that millet should only be the food to be promoted for being vitamin A rich. other sources of vitamin A includes green leafy vegetables and yellow - orange vegetables which can be easily farmed.The government should also promote these sources of vitamins to cut the reliance on a single type of food ar grain. Adapting to these other sources of vitamin A doesn't mean millet should be avoided.being the routine diet of the residents the genetically enhanced millet should be promoted along with other vegetables and grains.
Further, the argument says that the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. The country is already suffering from poverty and excessive efforts in promoting this breed of millet could backfire on the ministry.In addition to this , the exact amount of vitamin A in this new millet is not mentioned.If the irresolute amount of vitamin A is ingested it might cause chronic toxicity in the body.
In conclusion, the advancement in genetic engineering might be helpful till certain extent but public exposure should be avoided untill it is scientifically approved.Hence the suggestion that the government of the country should do everything in promotion of new breed of millet sounds disingenuous in essence of it being promoted only for the profit of the company manufacturing the millet.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK, better to say: maybe people don't like the taste
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1978 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.072 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.809 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.33 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.502 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.867 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35092348285 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02404642339 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482849604222 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.669217662 57.8364921388 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 225.333333333 119.503703932 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1111111111 23.324526521 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411651468072 0.218282227539 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168006337168 0.0743258471296 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789726639228 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219915302957 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472861491012 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.8 14.3799401198 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.39 48.3550499002 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 12.3882235529 178% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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