invention from past achievement
The author of the topic states an assertion that it is impossible to make large and meaningful contributions to one's field of work without the prior existence of past successes. While some may argue that this statement holds true all the time, others may counter that claim by providing examples of individuals who made significant contributions to their field of work without prior success. In my essay, I will highlight both sides of the argument, and also provide sound reasoning for my claims.
On one hand, the assertion seems probable. Because, if you look at the human's history, you will find that humans make many things which were seemed impossible, but they make it possible, for example, the invention of electricity, Telephone, etc. Today whatever endeavor we saw in any field is unique or extension of previous versions that were influenced by the past achievement, for example, before Facebook or any other social media site example Orkut, there are so many other sites are available but they are not providing the feature that Facebook is providing, however, their roots are same i.e. all of these are social media site. So we can say these are new in their own way but we can not deny the fact that these sites were influenced by past achievement.
However, it is also fair to say that while the above reasons might hold true in most cases, one cannot assert that it is impossible to achieve success without past achievement, because we have n number of the example where one has achieved success without any prior experience, for example, legendary Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King, did not have prior experience in leading a revolution. They did what their heart and mind were set out to do. They may have been powerful individuals, but they surely didn't achieve success by having prior experience in fighting for human rights.
Thus, it can be said that while achieving success in one's field does add a lot of weight to one's credibility, it is not a prerequisite to success. Success is a combination of hard work, determination, and luck. For some, luck plays in their favor better than others. For others, luck doesn't, and it is those people that aren't as lucky as others, who have to work harder, faster and better to get ahead in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e large and meaningful contributions to ones field of work without the prior existen...
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...ure that Facebook is providing, however, their roots are same i.e. all of these a...
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...hout past achievement, because we have n number of the example where one has achi...
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...ed success without any prior experience, for example, legendary Mahatma Gandhi, M...
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...dary Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King, did not have prior experience in leading...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, for example, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85347043702 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5990696154 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542416452442 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.164392081 60.3974514979 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109156754149 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311083533575 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352637607465 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0598322503393 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317286026047 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.