Issue: The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government
Argument: The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.
Issue:
The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Throughout history, there has been a plethora of great leaders that have performed extraordinary acts of service through gaining support, teaching and empowering the mass. Examing the prompt, to develop the youth to become great leaders it is best reached by instilling a sense of cooperation rather than competition. I would have to agree with the statement that this is the best route to lead to success and although competition does have its advantages, it does not rise above cooperation as a means to develop future great leaders.
Leaders have the ability to garner support from others so that ideas may be created, discussed and implemented. Leaders such as President Franklin D. Roosevelt who throughout his term in office, strived to bring people together to support the military during World War Two. FDR asked the citizens of America to discontinue the use of pennies so that the metal could be used for weapons in the war. He aimed to have food be rationed stateside so that we could send it to our troops in Europe. These are a few examples of how a great leader such as President Roosevelt used cooperation from the massive of America to support his policies and the troops fighting in the war.
Another example we can point to is the cooperation between President Roosevelt, the House of Representatives and the Senate during The Great Depression. In the midst of a nightmare, FDR reached across the political party lines to bring politicians who differed in beliefs, pushed collaboration ideas and policies which we refer to as the New Deal and built support so that the United States could pull itself out of the Great Depression by creating opportunities for Americans. This is one of the greatest examples of cooperation between groups of people who differ in political beliefs, came together in order to move forward.
However, competition does have its benefits when developing leaders as it influences individuals/groups to create bigger and better ideas. The realm of electric vehicles is a perfect example of how competition creates leaders. Telsa was at the forefront of the development and manufacturing of electric vehicles for a hand full of years. But now in 2021, we see the rise of new companies such as Rivian, Lucid Motors along with Ford, Chevy and Toyota now developing electric vehicles, creating competition between them, leading to improvements of products. While this is an example of how competition creates new leaders with in a specific industry, it still does not match up with cooperation to build future leaders as individuals/groups still need to work together, whether it is with eachother or with other companies.
To develop great leaders, I agree that cooperation is the best way in which to get to this goal rather than using competition as we can see from the examples above, cooperation brings individuals together to strive towards common goals and high amounts of success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... means to develop future great leaders. Leaders have the ability to garner suppo...
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...with eachother or with other companies. To develop great leaders, I agree that c...
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...mmon goals and high amounts of success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04948453608 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93067525954 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494845360825 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4250762018 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.055555556 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9444444444 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0772751236889 0.243740707755 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0256870071937 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242354043095 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0473897370001 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179029347662 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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