It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.

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It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.

Throughout the history, human have made numerous incredible works but at the same time occurred disastrous accidents by adhering to one’s own beliefs. Indeed it is important to have our own beliefs and try to develop to others and for the human future, however, it is dangerous when it threatens others’ rights or even lives. Thus, I assert that compromising one’s own beliefs is less harmful than cleaving to them for the several reasons mentioned below.

World War 2 is remembered as one of the most haphazard event that happened among the human history. Considering majority of German were with Nazism, some insist that their economic and social instability at that time led them to lose their conscious control and were easily eluded to Nazism. It didn’t allure people logically but emotionally of which can be explained by crowd mind in psychological term. The known consequences can’t be easily understandable in common sense, and this is why adhering to only one power belief can be more dangerous than compromising with conflicting views. What could have happened when Nazism were forbidded by righteous thoughts and be weakened? Maybe Holocaust could have been nonexistent at all.

Nevertheless, there are some cases that led huge success and positively affected our society by sticking to one’s own belief despite wide resistances. A movie called ‘October Sky’ showing 4 young boys’ the most challenging try to success the rocket launch where being a miner were the most promising thing in their village. No matter how people gave them derisive laughter, they still stick to their belief they will succeed and showed unlimited efforts which changed those who laughed at them to give expectations and encouraging them at last. At last, they succeeded and became celebrity in their town and influenced many people to have hope and try anything that looks impossible with the belief they can succeed as same as they did. Thus, in some cases, adhering to one’s belief might bring positive effect intrinsically.

However, it is still dangerous when you assert only one belief as human beings are easily to make mistakes. Evaluating the consequences of one’s conduct is actually could not be omitted when making important decisions which could affect a lot of people, society, or also to other nations. Like presidents of one’s nations can’t stick to one’s belief and policy because if they overlook the consequence which could harm people then it can’t be resolved easily and have to go through big negotiation or conflicts socially or diplomatically. In order to make the best choice, compromising with some conflicting views can complement one’s own idea to a better one.

In sum, some might think adhering to one’s own belief could bring unpredictable positive impact to our society and enhance our life. Indeed, sometimes it is useful but we should never overlook the consequence that could bring because it can change to an uncontrollable one if we don’t take good care. Sincerely considering and compromising with other conflicting views might can make one’s own belief to a stronger, agreeable or righteous one and more positively affect to our life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
... by adhering to one's own beliefs. Indeed it is important to have our own beliefs...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: ELUDED_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alluded to'?
Suggestion: alluded to
...their conscious control and were easily eluded to Nazism. It didn't allure people lo...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 518.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3166023166 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90614095539 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7952724764 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.142857143 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440686081932 0.243740707755 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141672914439 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113145903925 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273446727428 0.150359130593 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738429330345 0.0667264976115 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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