It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
I partially agree with the provided statement “It is primarily in cities where a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved”. Cities, regularly the fulcrum of immigration to a country, foster the generation of new cultural traditions. Whilst towns and areas outside of the city generally preserve and celebrate the existing traditions of their country.
Cities are a magnet for immigration into Australia with the vast majority of migrants choosing to live near or within one of the mainland capital cities. Immigration results in a large, culturally diverse group of people to begin new lives in these cities. With them comes the cultural traditions that are unique to the migrants home country. Often both the pre-existing and new cultural traditions are mixed to form new traditions within the country. For example; in Sydney, a large Asian, predominately Chinese, a community exists which has grown significantly in the past decades. This has fostered a new tradition within Sydney of both celebrating Chinese New Year as well as our own New Year. This is not uncommon in all major cities in Australia and has generated a new set of cultural traditions that mark Australia as being a multicultural country that celebrates not only our own beliefs and festivals but also those of other countries. Cities are regularly the epicenter of immigration in a country, new migrants bring their own traditions with them, resulting in a fused together set of cultural traditions being generated that now mark Australia’s cultural traditions.
However, limiting my position is that in certain issues a city may be very resistant to change. Whether this is due to a community clinging onto an old cherished belief due to the generation of new traditions evicting previously held ones is unknown. However, cities can be an epicenter for resisting any form of change. In many regions across Australia, there is a push to move 'Australia Day' to a different date. The reason being that currently Australia Day is held on the day the first settlers from the United Kingdom set foot in Australia, beginning a period of horrible treatment for indigenous Australians. Many regional regions have relinquished their tradition of celebrating Australia Day on that day or have at-least paid their respects to the awful treatment of indigenous Australia's. However, people in the cities have not considered this idea what so ever and will continue to celebrate Australia Day as has traditionally been done. Thus cities, although often accepting new traditions and adapting their own, can be extremely resistant to some forms of change and will cling onto these traditions strongly.
In conclusion, cities are often the center of cultural tradition generation and adaptation. Whilst regional areas cling onto pre-existing traditions with a doggedly. However, in certain cases cities can reverse and cling onto traditions with as much vigor as regional areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...t 'It is primarily in cities where a nations cultural traditions are generated and p...
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Line 3, column 670, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ey of both celebrating Chinese New Year as well as our own New Year. This is not uncommon ...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...a city may be very resistant to change. Whether this is due to a community clinging ont...
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Line 5, column 948, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lia Day as has traditionally been done. Thus cities, although often accepting new tr...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2500.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30785562633 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98881273488 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467091295117 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 787.5 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7906008087 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.636363636 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181575569716 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679000561356 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598599023203 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137620689172 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525300505174 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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