It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing a

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It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The author of statement points out that people can truly define themselves through identification with social groups. I’m partly agreed with this assertion, as no one can entirely live outside the social groups. However, if people stay too close with social organisations, it may disrupt their ability to think independently and critically.

Admittedly, with the fast growing of modern society, people are inevitable to engage in some social activities, whether such activities are online or in the real world. Through participating in some social groups, people can acquire different information, which may be helpful to adjust their own views toward specific fields. For example, as we all know, internet industry has experienced enormous changes in the past several decades. People working in this industry like software engineers need to upgrade their knowledge to avoid being left behind by others. To achieve this goal, attending related workshops is the best way to absorb the first hand information. Thus, modern society requires people to be part of some social groups so as to improve personal abilities.

However, being too close with social groups may lead to counterproductive results, as people may lose themselves in others’ ideas. For example, the Culture Revolution in China in 1960s could be defined as a catastrophe. The public worked and ate together, which made the people lack private lives. Everyone felt safe to stay with the groups, and people with their own thoughts were persecuted for being traitors of the main views. Under such a pressed social milieu, many intellectuals chose to end their lives with suicide. It was an tragedy to China and led to a great recession lasting at least a decade. Thus, the public should be vigilant about the penetration of group ideas into our own mind, as people’s independent thinking ability is crucial for personal development and well-being.

Summing up, while the importance of personal identification with social groups should not be overlooked, because people can learn a lot from others’ opinions, it is equally crucial to remember that people need to be alert about social activities to avert relying too much on other people’s views.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 737, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...people to be part of some social groups so as to improve personal abilities. However,...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1960s'.
Suggestion: in the 1960s
...xample, the Culture Revolution in China in 1960s could be defined as a catastrophe. The ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 538, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...to end their lives with suicide. It was an tragedy to China and led to a great rec...
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'at least', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233576642336 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.143552311436 0.157235817809 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.121654501217 0.0880659088768 138% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0462287104623 0.0497285424764 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0316301703163 0.0444667217837 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12895377129 0.12292977631 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0340632603406 0.0406280797675 84% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87910136932 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0413625304136 0.030933414821 134% => OK
Particles: 0.00486618004866 0.0016655270985 292% => OK
Determiners: 0.0705596107056 0.0997080785238 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0267639902676 0.0249443105267 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00486618004866 0.0148568991511 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2237.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 353.0 452.878318584 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.33711048159 6.0361032391 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.43342776204 0.366273622748 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.300283286119 0.280924506359 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192634560907 0.200843997647 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.118980169972 0.132149295362 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87910136932 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589235127479 0.48968727796 120% => OK
Word variations: 67.9572062483 55.4138127331 123% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7647058824 23.380412469 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0902476399 59.4972553346 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.588235294 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 23.380412469 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.674092028746 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 50.7930344943 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.79120879121 1.64882698954 109% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336823302505 0.391690518653 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0861483118801 0.123202303941 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0529287853848 0.077325440228 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.492633541304 0.547984918172 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161947691849 0.149214159877 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134833721646 0.161403998019 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521235318515 0.0892212321368 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.341292117416 0.385218514788 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0653286801537 0.0692045440612 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233846253224 0.275328986314 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055305668577 0.0653680567796 85% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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