It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves
Social groups can be formed at many places like offices, sports clubs, our residential areas etc. Majority of ones time will be spent with their social groups. Hence social groups play a very important role in once thriving. The prompt here recommends that it is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves. I partially agree with this for below two reasons.
Firstly, social groups can define you when your interests mostly align with that social group. As we spend majority of our time with the social groups and since our interests align with this social group, we learn a lot of things from this group. For instance, let us take a case of child who is interested in playing baseball. If the child is within the social group who are fond of playing and watching baseball, he will mostly be encouraged to play baseball. Since social group is full of baseball players, he may learn things quickly and also people in the group would point out at the mistakes, which will help him immensly. And also since this child interests align with the basketball player group, it may define him as basket ball player. This illustrates that if a persons interests align with social group it may interest
Secondly, However social groups may not define us when our interests doesn't align with that social group. For instance, let us a take an example of school kid whose friends are usually mischievious in some ways. However, this doesn't implicate that this kid is mischevious as well. One more instance for this is, let us take an example of apartment where many of the singers live. If someone chooses live in the same apartment because of good facilities in that area and proximity to hospitals etc doesn't mean that he is interested in singing. This illustrates that the social group we choose may not always define us.
To conclude, our social groups may not always define ourselvses. Whatever may be social group we are in, we have power to choose and do anything. If your interests align with the social group you chose then it will define you and if interest doesn't align with social group it may not define you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ps may not define us when our interests doesnt align with that social group. For insta...
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...ischievious in some ways. However, this doesnt implicate that this kid is mischevious ...
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...of the singers live. If someone chooses live in the same apartment because of good f...
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...hat area and proximity to hospitals etc doesnt mean that he is interested in singing. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78016085791 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3701066283 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450402144772 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2781268184 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.15 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453405555066 0.243740707755 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16953439281 0.0831039109588 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163157331571 0.0758088955206 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332997477027 0.150359130593 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101529992823 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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