The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
It is very human nature that from the beginning of the world that people loves the luxury and convenience in life. The prompt argue about this issue and claims that luxuries and convenience in life hinders a people to become a strong independent individual human being. I mostly disagree with the prompt for following reason which I will outline below. However, I do concede that there are a few cases which suggest that luxury and convenience has a negative effect on the development of human.
To begin, Luxury and convenience of modern life enable people more time for focusing on his other work and developing better individual. For instance, in the hunting and gathering society people’s main job was to collect food and eat it and again look for food because they were not able to store food. At that time people was busy was only for the collection of food, and eating it. As a result they was not able to concentrate on other work such as art, literature, science etc. When people developed a method for cultivating food, they move toward the practice of art, science and literature and made many of discoveries on those field. The luxuries of life helped people to concentrate on other job and enabled them to develop themselves.
Furthermore, luxury and convenience of life reduces stress on people and keeps them in good mental condition and which helps them to work efficiently in working time. For instance, in modern day we can see the luxuries of life from morning until night. Our day start with cooking food for breakfast with the help of modern cooker, we travel by to our workplace by car and sleep home under air conditioned room. This life’s luxuries helped us to stay in good mental shape and we can concentrate better on our work while we are working. Imagine a man doing all of these using previously used technologies, will it be possible than for the people work efficiently on other work? Most people will say it wouldn’t.
Admittedly, I do agree that Luxury and convenience of life have made people lazy at times. For example due to the advancement of modern technology people now a days can get everything from home, from ordering food to buying daily basic necessities. It has resulted in decrease in amount of physical movement that people used to do previously. As a result, now a days we see increase in the number of various disease like diabetes, obesity, etc. Doctor says that this would not have occurred if we worked more physically than we are doing today.
To conclude, luxury and convenience has made life easier by reducing the work stress and making more time available for doing other work. However, it has also bring some disease to us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...advancement of modern technology people now a days can get everything from home, from orde...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ncement of modern technology people now a days can get everything from home, from orde...
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Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ome, from ordering food to buying daily basic necessities. It has resulted in decrease in amount ...
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ple used to do previously. As a result, now a days we see increase in the number of variou...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...used to do previously. As a result, now a days we see increase in the number of variou...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
... doing other work. However, it has also bring some disease to us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7687366167 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58151232761 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494646680942 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7037905667 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8260869565 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201158251408 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705992149138 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059244495809 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128203956218 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851149065475 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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