The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Every time I see a new sunrise, I am bombarded by a plethora of technological innovations just as one would get bombarded by sunrays everyday. The world is fast evolving like never before and is opportune to ponder upon the question - are we becoming more dependent or more independent as days pass by? I personally feel that the modern luxuries and conveniences make us more independent for the reasons stated below.
Firstly, it is true that we are increasingly depending upon different technologies that aid us ease our life in ways that were not dreamt even in the wildest dreams by our ansectors. From passing a message to our beloved residing on the opposite side of the earth in a fraction of a second to self driving cars to analyzing tons of data that would literally take generations to comprehend it, we are witnessing technological innovations at an unprecedented rate. One who is myopic would fallaciously claim that - "Yes! we are increasingly dependent on the convenieces that we have presently". However, upon deliberation, if we closely look at the tasks that the technology is fulfulling, we can see a common attribute among those tasks. These tasks are actually repetative and time consuming. Once we figured out the set of steps required to accomplish a task, we can just handover the tasks to the machines in that they are infinite times better than humans to do a repetative tasks for infinite amount of time at the same level of efficiency. This gives human beings more time to contemplate on other problems which involve critical thinking, imagination and creativity. Hence, it is not about how dependant we are upon the luxuries and conveniences we have but it is aobut what we are capable of doing given that the tedious and mundane tasks are being handled by machines.
Moreover, the technologies we enjoy today have in fact, made us become stronger and more independent. In this context, I would like to delineate the scenario in India 2 decades ago and the present. In the past, our communites were heavily dependent on each other. We were depedent on others not only for labor intensive and time consuming tasks like going from one place to another or growing food for the communities but also for petty tasks like cleaning the house or making food for the family. However, if we look at the present scenario in India, we use large machinery that can be manouvered by a single person to harvest the crop in just a couple of days which used to more that a fortnight 2 decades ago. Similarly, we cook food in no time and without much knowledge about the ingredients, thanks to the premixed recepies and efficient cooking technology. And look at all the time we have to spend time with the family and ponder upon other tasks that actually reqiure profound thinking which wouldn't be possible if it is not for the luxuries and conveniences we enjoy today.
However, in the realms of our discussion, we cannot overlook the situations where we can blatantly see that we have inadvertently become dependent upon the conveniences that we come across daily. For instance, let us take the case of food delivery. We are so used to ordering food from a nearby restaurant that we have reached state where we have to sleep hungry if the restaurents are closed abruptly. It is clear that we have become more dependent on the prevaling system and it has made us incapable.
Therefore, it is not asinine to say that the luxuries and the conveniences we enjoy today have made us more stronger and independent as they allow us to work with more intelluctual tasks and at the same time, they provide us more time to spend it in the ways we would like to. But at the same time, I would not go the extent of edorsing my opinion completely as there are scenarios where we have unwittingly become more dependent on them and we cannot do away with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...t as one would get bombarded by sunrays everyday. The world is fast evolving like never ...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...d below. Firstly, it is true that we are increasingly depending upon different technologies that aid us...
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Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ld fallaciously claim that - 'Yes! we are increasingly dependent on the conve...
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Line 6, column 1003, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ctually reqiure profound thinking which wouldnt be possible if it is not for the luxuri...
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Line 10, column 104, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...onveniences we enjoy today have made us more stronger and independent as they allow us to wor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, moreover, second, similarly, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 86.0 33.0505617978 260% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3208.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 674.0 442.535393258 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75964391691 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0952438579 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81360480092 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458456973294 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1063.8 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4528251256 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0546907687075 0.243740707755 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0208591344499 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.028604127769 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0418805721032 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170203173759 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 100.480337079 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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