The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The things that make our deigning tasks easier and help us to achieve a task expedite with less efforts, are the conveniences of our life. On the other hand, luxury is an ostentatious convenience, that is used not just to make it life easier but to make it rather showy. However, both the terms luxury and convenience are subjective terms. Here, the author states that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong independent individuals. I do not concur with author for the former statement, some of the ways in which I illustrate my position are as follows.
To begin with, the first question that comes in my mind is, who is a strong and independent individual? The term differs from person to person and region to region. For example, for one person strong and independent individual means, who does not have to do even a single task at home. He will have servants for himself, who will do all the chores for him, from cooking food to serving him a glass of water. In my opinion, strong and independent individuals are those, even after failing many times in their career or personal life, they tend to remain strong and motivated. No matter how unfathomable the problem is, they greet problem with open arms and try to find solution for it.
Moreover, the views regarding convenience and luxury remains different between developed and developing countries. In developing countries such as India or Bangladesh, for the families of middle class, hiring a cab for going to work is quiet luxury due to their low income. Conversely, in developed countries such as America or Australia, hiring a cab for going to work is convenience.
Finally, convenience helps the people to achieve their task easily and efficiently, therefore, a person has more time to deal with his problems and find solution to it. It is not so that person always will be in trouble, however, with the help of convenience a person can re-learn or re-skill himself. Indeed which helps him to be in job market as per requirement, so that he can be self sufficient. For example, a convenience of washing machine or laundry service, which help people to save time and energy on washing clothes, and then invest the same in other places which helps to gain career advancement or re-creational activities.
Besides, the opponents of the issue might argue that, convenience and luxury do prevent people from developing into strong and independent individual. As an illustration, smart phones which were supposed to help people increase their productivity and can be used to learn or read, are not being used as thought so. People spend lot of hours daily on social media, before going to bed which lead to disturbing sleep patterns and reducing productivity, inducing lethargy or stress.
TO recapitulate, the definition of convenience, luxury and strong and independent persons differs. I believe, convenience and luxury does not prevent people from becoming strong and independent individual. Also, there's a fine line between use or misuse, if crossed may lead a person to nadir. Nonetheless, mankind has reached to a new high just to make their life easier and full of convenience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 92, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun efforts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...help us to achieve a task expedite with less efforts, are the conveniences of our li...
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Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'terms'' or 'term's'?
Suggestion: terms'; term's
...make it rather showy. However, both the terms luxury and convenience are subjective t...
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Line 2, column 549, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...r with author for the former statement, some of the ways in which I illustrate my position ...
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Line 8, column 303, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...erson can re-learn or re-skill himself. Indeed which helps him to be in job market as ...
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Line 12, column 213, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...trong and independent individual. Also, theres a fine line between use or misuse, if c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, for example, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99813780261 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83763444954 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493482309125 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8743596555 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.36 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.48 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283881491934 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877520053343 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832466963358 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153424069008 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634541521286 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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