The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning f

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The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life helps people in developing into truly strong and independent individuals. Nowadays, people need not depend on other people for many purposes. Instead people can depend on their luxuries for their purposes.

Firstly, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life helps people in developing into independent individuals. For instance, many electronic gadgets help people in many ways in their daily routine making them independent and preventing them from depending on others for their daily tasks such as washing clothes, cleaning utensils and making their own food. Some of the luxuries and conveniences like electronic wheelchair help physically handicapped people making them truly independent. These people need not depend on other people for their daily routine.

Secondly, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life helps people in developing into truly strong individuals. For instance, people can protect their properties using advanced security luxuries. This way they can protect themselves and their own property from being stolen making them strong individuals. Countries can protect their own people from terrorists and attacks made by people from other countries by making use of advanced military equipments and advanced monitoring systems. This way any country can become a strong country making strong individuals in the country.
Sometimes people may face problems if they depend excessively on the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life. For instance, people have to do their daily routine on their own if there is a power shortage for a long time or the electronic gadgets do not work effectively. However, this happens in rare cases and people can handle these problems by replacing their electronic goods. There are many choices for the luxuries in contemporary life. People can make use of alternate luxuries if their current luxuries do not work effectively.

People can become truly strong and independent individuals by taking advantage of the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...pend on other people for many purposes. Instead people can depend on their luxuries for...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...ing utensils and making their own food. Some of the luxuries and conveniences like electron...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other people for their daily routine. Secondly, the luxuries and conveniences ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.5258426966 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.3162921348 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 315.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66349206349 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92677064263 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 215.323595506 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387301587302 0.4932671777 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0138867462 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228280422622 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123590643042 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109202645729 0.0758088955206 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190650800068 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623591003304 0.0667264976115 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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