The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Daily lifestyle is quite influenced by habits which is the nature of mankind. Humans are the slave of habitual facts whether it is good or bad. The prompt says if anyone accustomed to a pompous life it is difficult to refrain themselves from hard working for self development which can help to the individuals as a self growing person directly or indirectly. Thereby I strongly agree with the statement for two reasons.
Firstly, luxury and hard working both are the opposite side of a coin. For the self development of an individuals one must have to do a hard core job. In any case grandiloquent life standard hinders anyone to take a path which involves lot of struggle and risk at the same time. For example, people living in the developing countries are under privileged and they could not even fulfill their basic rights which is food, cloth, shelter, treatment and education. And if they don't even try to change their fate by extreme hard working it won’t be possible for themselves to transform their condition. So the fuel of working die hard will come from their poor condition of being under rated lifestyle. Therefore if we consider the opposite side of the coin one habituated with the luxury will take it for granted. And they will not even try to develop of their own as they are living their best at present. So, as long as the state of basic need concerns one will not try to nourish oneself which will lead to an ultimate better version from previous one.
Secondly, growing as an independent individual both mentally and physically is not a trivial task to attain. One must have to broaden the capacity to deal with the upcoming problem and the tendency to withstand all the struggle that will come forward. Self development is the tool of measuring ones effort that has been given in their day to day life. And there are too many factors which hinders the path of the improvement. Luxury is one of them. For instance, if we can see the state of the developed country there are too many people coming from outside which they are hiring to develop the condition as the privileged people of the country already taken the luxury as granted and not even trying to help themselves as a developed individuals. So, leading the life that everyone dreams and simultaneously working with the tool for upbringing personal virtue is not possible.
Of course some will argue that why to develop oneself as long as their current state is not affected and why to choose the hard path while having all the benefits and dwelling at the best anyone can have. However, the urge for betterment will come forward only if anyone have the cravings for a privileged and pompous life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
... of a coin. For the self development of an individuals one must have to do a hard core job. In...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...r, treatment and education. And if they dont even try to change their fate by extrem...
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Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: underrated
...come from their poor condition of being under rated lifestyle. Therefore if we consider the...
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Line 3, column 699, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ndition of being under rated lifestyle. Therefore if we consider the opposite side of the...
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Line 3, column 904, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... they are living their best at present. So, as long as the state of basic need concern...
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Line 4, column 295, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...lf development is the tool of measuring ones effort that has been given in their da...
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Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ones effort that has been given in their day to day life. And there are too many ...
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Line 4, column 582, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'hire' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...ming from outside which they are hiring to develop the condition as the privileged people ...
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Line 4, column 674, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the country already taken the luxury as granted and not even trying to help them...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...erment will come forward only if anyone have the cravings for a privileged and pompo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, of course, in any case
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70700636943 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51513241523 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464968152866 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2363801004 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.772727273 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165014908349 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501773988658 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444411086134 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109387988451 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549262745841 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.