The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Over the several decades, a lot of individuals have hold some belief as regards contemporary life luxuries and the status quo of been an independent individual. This prompt attempt to address the issue by proposing that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. I mostly disagree with this notion and I believe that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life does not prevent people from becoming a truly strong and reliable individuals for two reasons. However, I do concede that in extreme position conveniences of contemporary life could hamper an individual from becoming self-sustainable.
First of all, it is evident that when people do things with easy, productivity is inevitable. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life could greatly help individuals to innovate and help solve any societal issues and subsequently help to become a self-reliable person. For instance, In the most populated states in Nigeria, a student of University of Lagos who was born with silver spoon in his mouth exhibited a high level of independent after his graduation. While living with his parent, he already learn the pros and cons of becoming rich and making money, he immediately he graduated, he started doing things on his own and his success story was over newspaper last week. It is highly imperative for us to note that this student doesn’t allow his background which comes inform of comfort and luxuries to affect him.
Furthermore, evidence has advanced that most successful people have in one way or the other have a dialogue with the successful people in the past. Convenience does not in any way hamper an individual from been an independent person, it is all boil down to the person desires and determination for success and growth. While they are many people who do not leave conveniences contemporary life and still yet, they are not independent both in their action and in their thought. Been independent in life is not a function of luxuries of contemporary life, it is solely a function of the individual life aim and objectives.
Finally, I do concede that in extreme position that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life could hamper individual from becoming an independent person, it could not be denied that most innovative personnel in the world are the people who does not have access to luxuries and comfort while growing up. This helped them to navigate their thought process very well, in which turn motivated them to invent great idea that is useful to the world at large.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 513, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...hile living with his parent, he already learn the pros and cons of becoming rich and ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a that is useful to the world at large.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, well, while, as regards, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1391509434 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9839734116 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1387280083 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.266666667 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297589214563 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116014217554 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879175677155 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197263642801 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970467867796 0.0667264976115 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.