The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
With recent technology, contemporary life has been a lot more luxurious and convenient than any other time. Some people say this new lifestyle has made us weaker and less independent. However, I do not agree with this opinion. I rather believe that we have been stronger and more independent with our affluent and comfortable life for the following reasons.
Firstly, we have more time for hobbies. Technologies have saved time in many aspects of our lives. For example, we can spend less time on house chores with dishwashers and laundry machines. To be specific, what we need to do for washing the dishes and doing the laundry is just putting them in the machines and waiting until they complete the tasks. During the time we saved as the machines are working for us, we can do other things for ourselves such as reading books, doing exercises, or playing musical instruments. I believe the times for developing our internal sides allow us to become stronger individuals.
Secondly, we can do more things by ourselves. For example, we can travel anywhere without hiring a tour guide. On the internet, there is a lot of information that we can access anytime if we have an internet connection. Thus, in order to plan our new trips, all we need to do is finding a place where we want to visit and buying tickets from online websites. When we get there, we can easily move from places to places following recommended instructions of a map application. This is just one of the numerous examples of how contemporary technologies enabled us to live an independent life, requiring less help from others.
There is nothing that accompanies only bright sides. I acknowledge that our luxury and convenient contemporary lives also have dark sides. However, overall, I believe contemporary life has made us stronger and more independent for the reasons I abovementioned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'place'.
Suggestion: place
...here, we can easily move from places to places following recommended instructions of a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94267515924 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87081023082 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550955414013 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6492237229 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6842105263 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121338268658 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438520327649 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600466643071 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101843837891 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652874359619 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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