In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People are always seeking heroes who might change the current world into a better one. Although some people say finding a hero has become impossible with the advent of media, our lives have been demonstrated it is not true.
Firstly, in fact, media have made more people heroes. Heroes are those who made a significant contribution to a certain field - it can be music, engineering, politics, or medicine - but it is not everything; in order to be recognized as a hero, they have to be reported to the public in any ways. When media did not cover vast fields but confined in several fields such as business, entertainment, and politics, heroes of other fields were hardly discovered. However, with the broadened media coverage, more people from various fields could have been heroes. For example, during COVID19, people who work in harsh and dangerous situations are frequently reported these days in the news, and many people got to know there are heroes who make we can continue a safe life. If there were no such news, they might never have been recognized by the public, and they might have had no chances to be called heroes. Thus, it shows media are taking a role to introduce new heroes to the world.
Secondly, media filter spurious heroes from genuine heroes. The given prompt might have come from the cases of losing hero titles due to scandals revealed by media. However, it is not like making impossible anyone be a hero but culling those who are not a real hero. For example, Hyunsoek Yang, a previous CEO of YG, one of the biggest entertainment companies in Korea, was considered a hero of the K-POP industry. However, he was related to crimes and some amount of money of the company was used in illegal actions. After his misbehaviors have been reported by media, the public realized that he was not a real hero. Although some might this kind of situation occlude the birth of a hero, it is not like that but it is filtering spurious heroes.
To sum up, media is actually making more heroes from uninterested areas, and their possibly considered negative actions to the birth of heroes are actually filtering fake heroes from real heroes. Thus, the given prompt cannot be agreed upon.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 809, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have never been
... If there were no such news, they might never have been recognized by the public, and they migh...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...it is not like making impossible anyone be a hero but culling those who are not a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in fact, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77748691099 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49331653283 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502617801047 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7599092559 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.388888889 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123539614552 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455500448351 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192469035022 0.0758088955206 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840493967142 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0054317571179 0.0667264976115 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.