The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the modern era,life was dependent on various gadgets from advanced technology.Life has surely become more easier and hassle-free.But I disagree with the above statement where luxuries and contemporary life prevented from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Firstly, we are now in golden era of technology and development where every move we make is towards improvisation and digitization.But it does not imply that this luxurious life is making people more dependent.The world has seen many individuals who worked tirelessly even after their failures to achieve their dreams .For example,consider Mukesh Ambani,a famous second generation industrialist in India.Having all the conveniences in life didn't stop him from working hard to achieve his goal of making Reliance one of the best industries all over the world.Continuous motivation and striving for success is what played a vital role in their achievements.Consider Steve jobs who has been removed from Apple in 1985 .This did not stop him from working but was rather more determined and he was later appointed in for his leadership skills.
Although there might be cases where certain individuals become accustomed to luxuries in life without any hardwork.This makes in incapable of doing something reproductive as they have been dependent their entire life.Many industries lost their past glory in the incapable hands.For example consider a child who has been pampered by their parents his whole life.It's next to impossible for him to find a himself a work or position in the competitive society as he has been coddled his entire life.
To conclude,it is important that one should have survival skills in life irrespective of the luxuries in life.This makes them more independent and a better individual.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 278.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46402877698 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29909459609 2.79657885939 118% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640287769784 0.4932671777 130% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 23.0359550562 300% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 255.503791557 60.3974514979 423% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 379.75 118.986275619 319% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.5 23.4991977007 296% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.21951772744 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164751882005 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119117378728 0.0831039109588 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792959439802 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119117378728 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792959439802 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.0 14.1392134831 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -7.02 48.8420337079 -14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.92365168539 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 12.1743820225 258% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.57 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.55 8.38706741573 138% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 34.0 11.8971910112 286% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.6 11.2143820225 264% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.7820224719 255% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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