The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The world has seen a great boom in advancements in various fields, be it science, technology or medicine. People now indulge in various practices to feel strong and independent. Some people claim otherwise, stating that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into a truly strong and independent individual. I disagree with people who hold such a view. On the contrary, I feel people have become more independent and strong due to the luxuries of today's world. The reasoning behind my position as well as a few supporting examples will be provided in brief, in the paragraphs below.
Twenty-first century civilization has experienced a huge progress when it comes to technology, especially those realted to computers. People today are more inclined towards picking up jobs similar to a freelancer. Such a position prevents a person from committing his entire life to one organization and at the same time have security in terms of money. Such a feat has been achieved only due the luxuries of contemporary life, that is the internet. Internet has been a boon to civilization as people can conduct meetings and take up projects for their freelance jobs without having a physical encounter. The job of a freelance releases a person from the reigns of strict working hours, he can work for how long he wants and whenever he wants to, but at the same time adhere to the delivery deadlines. Such a situation allows a person to invest time on themselves and become a better person. Luxuries of contemporary life have truly helped a person become more independent.
An interesting domain that has substantial contribution towards contemporary conveniences and luxury is biomedical. Recent success in this domain has seen medicines and vaccines getting developed at economical rates. Medicines are now available at chemists at prices that are available at prices wherein the lower-middle class can also afford to buy it. Epidemics like Ebola, SARS, and Swine Flu have been successfully eradicated. These vaccines and medicines have increased the mortality rate in the world, and has made indviduals strong and resistant to several dieases. If it were not for such medications, we would have experienced a very low mortality rate.
Proponents of the above statement would point out towards the sedentary lifestyle that the kids today indulge in. They are more or less couch potatoes who sit in front of the television and gain no particular knowledge out of it and at the same time spoil their health. I agree that such a habit should be eradicated as soon as possible, but blaiming the kids will not help, nor will blaiming contemporary luxuries. It should be the duty of the parents to promote an active life, filled with extra-curricular activities and the teachers at school should encourage it as well. Blaming current luxuries and conveniences would not reverse a child's declining health.
In sum, I am still against the statement that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into a truly strong and independent individual. The trend of recent advancements and innovations have only pointed out towards promoting a stronger and a more independent way of living life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, well, i feel, in brief, as well as, more or less, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2727.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17457305503 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9995600905 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50284629981 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8367736888 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.0 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5185185185 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62962962963 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225358327619 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663434240811 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950987663979 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147842500612 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101024964407 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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