The main objective of education is to procure a job.
The primary purposre of education can be rationally accepted as to extend or to push the human capabilities beyond its current limits, I partially disagree to the statement that the main objective of education is to procure a job. Rather education seeks to do more than that, to inculcate a man with sense of personal and social development.
Education, at its first place, gives a sense or feeling of self-existence to a human being. It shows man the difference between right and wrong. It teaches and enhances the decision making capabilities of individuals. Education leads to overall development of the society. Considering all these points, education is only to procure job would be too narrow reason to justify the time and money that is currently being invested into the field of academia. Jobs are, indeed, created by a man only. That man himself needs to be highly educated to lead the others.
While in some cases, when one's family is financially weak, securing a job may be the only safe way to emancipate from the financial burden and instability. A majority of population in developing countries come under this category. For them, getting good education is the only way to secure a job that pays enough to run their family. These people form the working class which indirectly contribute to the country's development.
On the other hand, if everyone runs behind the jobs there would not be any entrepreneurs and there would not be any growth in the field of education, innovation and business which ultimately contradicts the sole purpose of education
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, while, as to, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 262.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00763358779 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86304322197 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614503816794 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.6496023457 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7142857143 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322371305817 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884308183672 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106438561539 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184926179002 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111488199489 0.0667264976115 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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