According to the context of the issue, it is surmise posited that electronic media and internet has have shorten the attention span of individuals in specific area or topic. And to support the clause there is one more theory posited that anyway it helps the individuals to to think about lot of different things and aspects of same or other topics. There are lot of aspects and divergent branches which needs to be lighted to get up to the marked conclusion.
Mass media in it is big conundrum, which can solve the the purpose or it can enhance the thinking of yours to see the different perspectives of the same problem or issue. As to the brief, contextualized in issue that lot of this days people are not able to concentrate or stick there attention to one thing or probably the topic of attention is ephemeral, which changes on course of time a lot. There can be various reasons to it which were not discussed or highlighted in paraphrase. As archaic studies tell us, that the inventors were not only had pundits or mastery in one subject, They accumulated lot of knowledge by probity to each and every subject of their interest. By such a way of things it enables the person to look out of the box and thing beyond the possibilities. And history has provided us lot of independent evidences to support this surmise. Media in it's role are doing good job as overall this days by switching quiescent possibilities to give window to peoples to think rationally about various different aspects of there interest.
It is kind to highlight that the people usually diverge their attention to the more alluring topics or subject. It always depend on person how the take up abeyance, if person is truly diligent and cogent toward the subject or topic, no medium can harm or deviate his attention from the needful topic. It is brief fallacy which is topic of discussion, which blames media and digital sources for spoiling attention. To support the thesis, author has mentioned and brief or assumption that people who tend to change their perspective on basis of changing mass media, enables them to think beyond the circumscribed boundaries. But to prove above statement author didn't provide much enough evidence which would likely to tempt us to think coherently that it meet expected result.
Thinking rationally about the whole issue, we can conclude that Mass media by some nuance can not be subtle reason for change of attention, there are lot of factor associated to theme which indirectly add lot to the conclusion. But by giving plethora of ready information from media person can enable himself to find more alluring and compassionate topic or subject which he or her will love to give attention. As a whole Mass media is good form of window for person to explore his possibilities of choice which one would truly incorporate once he find true choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... that electronic media and internet has have shorten the attention span of individua...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'shortened'.
Suggestion: shortened
... electronic media and internet has have shorten the attention span of individuals in sp...
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ed that anyway it helps the individuals to to think about lot of different things and...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...in it is big conundrum, which can solve the the purpose or it can enhance the thinking ...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...in it is big conundrum, which can solve the the purpose or it can enhance the thinking ...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
Suggestion: depends
...e alluring topics or subject. It always depend on person how the take up abeyance, if ...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e his attention from the needful topic. It is brief fallacy which is topic of disc...
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Line 5, column 660, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...es. But to prove above statement author didnt provide much enough evidence which woul...
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Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...ich one would truly incorporate once he find true choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, if, look, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8016194332 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66462281053 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481781376518 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7402655113 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.777777778 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4444444444 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.77777777778 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163679609786 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549701396255 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366653785186 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107002525762 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021559471002 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.