Today's contemporary world runs on information, networking, sharing and linking. Internet and Mass media play a major role in developing all these characteristics and making our world smaller, bridging the gap of distance and knowledge that used to exist in ancient times. Gadgets such as mobile phones, laptops, tablets, TV etc have now become an intrinsic part of everyone's life. Profound use of such gadgets has affected human life in multiple ways - both positive and negative. Hence, It is appropriate to say that our attention spans have now reduced, but we are now proficient in sorting through large quantities of data and finding the most important information.
A human being is constantly surrounded by gadgets and appliances which are there to make his/her tasks easier or to provide entertainment. Now we have a plethora of options to do one job. Suppose we want to play music, we can either play it on our phones, laptop, iPod, music system. We tend to get bored easily by one thing and have the habit of switching between the multiple options we have. This, in turn, has reduced our ability to focus on one single thing. The best example to support this statement would be reading. Earlier people used to read a lot and it is a known fact that reading increases the focus of a person. Now as a majority of books, novels are converted into movies, tv series people prefer to watch it live in action embellished with high graphics CGI and sound rather than reading a book. Though it provides entertainment but does not have the same merits as that of reading a book. People have lost the patience to read a book for a few days, instead, they will simply watch a 3-hour movie highlighting only the important moments of that book and missing out small intricate details.
Everything has its own pros and cons. Now information is readily available as compared to antiquity. In earlier times, to search for a topic or to learn something, one had to go through a lot of hard books which would require an ample amount of time and energy. Now one can easily search on the internet for the information they are looking for. This provides us with an extra edge to sort through a large volume of information and actually focus on what is the most important result, instead of wasting time on searching. To learn one can easily find an ebook or learn through videos which is a better way to retain information.
One can observe that the positive effects of mass media and the internet are more as compared to the cons. One can argue that this makes us more dependent on technology and results in making us lazier. To avoid this, technology should be used in a way which enhances human abilities instead of degrading them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 727, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lives'?
Suggestion: lives
...es, tv series people prefer to watch it live in action embellished with high graphic...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...of mass media and the internet are more as compared to the cons. One can argue tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, if, look, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72955974843 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6067885837 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530398322851 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7668567352 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.79166666667 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245927365372 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615995142213 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484712855741 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139329932999 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238154411255 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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