“Nowadays people are always on their phones” is a very commonly heard phrase in this modern era of technological advancement. Although, the widespread access of the internet and other mass media has been a very huge advantage for mankind, it has its fair share of problems. The adverse effects can be seen in increased use of social media and people being susceptible to information from unreliable sources.
Let us first begin by considering how excessively people spend their time on social media sites like Instagram or Facebook. People of all ages and culture are actively using social media to such an extent that it has become a major factor in their life and one cannot stop this addiction. The strain it has on one’s eyes and the mental health is pernicious and can have negative impact in the long run of people’s lives. Many people often don’t realize that social media does not necessarily depict all aspects of a person’s life and usually people only potray their positive side on the internet. Hence, this can be very misleading to others who often go into depression not realizing that others do face problems in their lives. Short attention span is also a side effect of excessive use of mass media and people are always looking for new and exciting things to do, often forgetting what patience means.
Additionally, when we take a look at the vast amount of information available on the internet, it is not always the reliable. In fact, the internet is flooded with spam websites and emails whose only intention is to get confidential information from the users. A majority of the people are not ready to verify the source of the information and rather act upon the information hastily. A recent incident in India where a mob attacked and killed a Muslim man for allegedly selling beef became viral. After careful investigation by the police, it was later revealed that the man was attacked because of a Whatsapp message which falsely claimed that he was killing cows.
In light of the above examples, it is clear that although mass media has made a favourable impact on people’s life, one cannot ignore it’s adverse effects on people’s attention span and their mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ession not realizing that others do face problems in their lives. Short attention...
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Suggestion:
... often forgetting what patience means. Additionally, when we take a look at the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, so, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99733333333 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79065105904 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4639342951 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 124.933333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261480240579 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866432917999 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645586206007 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167130213043 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658850514023 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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