Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
encouraging students to choose fields of study that will provide them with lucrative careers is not only highly immoral but also results in many drawbacks which can affect the life of the student in the long run. students should follow their interests and not be running behind money at early stages of development. moreover, any career can be lucrative if the student works hard and is at the top of his field of study.
Let us assume that schools do encourage students to choose lucrative fields of study and force them to study a subject for which they have no interest. then, the students who graduate with a degree in that particular field will only have ordinary skill sets since he has no passion or interest for the field. this can result him in being ended up with a modest job where there is only a moderate pay. hence, the school's objective of preparing the student for a lucrative career has failed. Suppose most of students start graduating with a degree in the field of engineering or medicine, which are commonly considered as lucrative careers, it will result in a very large workforce in these fields. therefore, the demand for jobs in these sectors will decrease which leads to lower wages in these fields which are considered lucrative. this can have a devastating effect on the economy and students will stop pursuing these fields of study and look for options elsewhere. hence, the goal of the educational institutions to promote students to take up field of study leading to lucrative careers can become counterproductive.
Additionally, the word meaning of the word 'lucrative careers' is very vague and can hold different meanings for different people. For example, not everyone considers money as the criteria for choosing a particular career and for such people, job satisfaction might be more important than money. hence, lucrative need not necessarily mean money for everyone. moreover, people usually consider only fields like engineering and medicine as lucrative. However, one might be surprised to the amount of money paid to mechanics in Formula 1 racing. Their wages will be twice the amount of money any doctor or engineer is ever paid. hence, this example proves that, no matter which field one takes up as their career, if they are working hard and are passionate about the field, then they will definitely make any career choice lucrative enough.
Finally, students should always follow their dreams and passion rather than chasing money at a very young. such students who always seek money from careers will never amount to anything since they will have least interest in their jobs and cannot excel in their careers beyond a certain point. hence, students should focus more the work to be done rather than the amount of money they are being paid.
To summarize, it is not very effective for schools to encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers since it curtails the students' freedom of choice to follow his/her interests and dreams. therefore, it has many drawbacks and can also be counterproductive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 518.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03281853282 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58832509789 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442084942085 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5364905311 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.347826087 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5217391304 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293847264956 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102961768749 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733366848046 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194403058566 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689351428201 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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