MEN AND WOMEN, BECAUSE OF THEIR INHERENT PHYSICAL DIFFERENCES, CANNOT PERFORM EQUITABLE TASKS.
Biologically, men and women possess inherent physical differences. However, does this mean that there are some tasks better suited to men and some better suited to women? I agree that this is true. Men and women alike share many similarities physically, mentally and emotionally. While there are some tasks that are not gender specific, there are some that are gender specific. For the reasons, there will be tasks better performed by one gender when compared to the other. In the following paragraphs, I will be discussing the reason why I think this is true.
Considering some biological roles between men and women, It is evident that the task of child bearing can only be perfomed by women. This is because women are biologically equipped with the organs that make the task of child bearing possible. The woman has a womb that houses the feotus from conception to delivery. Upon delivery, the woman also posses mammary glands that not only contains milk to feed the baby, but also contains colostrum which has been proven to contain certain antibodies and nutrients that are central to the survival and growth of the new born. Consequently, it is recommended by the World Health Organisation (WHO) that new borns are to be feed exclusively breast milk at the early stages of their development as this is crucial to the development of the baby mentally and physically. While there are scientific and technologically advancement that can allow men become pregnant and maybe breast feed a baby, this kind of endeavours do come with certain complications that can prove fatal to both the baby and the man.
Moving on from the task of child bearing, certain activites that are high risk and labour intensive are better for men. Take for instance the construction and mining industry in the industrial period. Construction workers and cavemen were predominantly men. This is still true to date. This is because men are physically stronger when compare to female and as such they can endure tasks that require a lot of physical strength for a much longer period when compared to females. In addition, the safety conditions during the industrial era where not as developed as they currently are which meant that most contruction and mining activities were high risk. An example is the contruction of they Empire state building. As at the period when the building was being contructed, safety harness were not a yet a safety requirement. Men are able to take on such high risk and labour intensive jobs due to the fact that they have a higher level of totestorone - a hormone found in men that is responsible for the development of secondary characteristics in men amongst other.
While most of the tasks that exist in our modern society tends to be more mentally demanding and less physically demanding such as roles in the banking and technological sector. However, there are still tasks that are better suited for men rather than women and vice versa.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9476861167 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73798475879 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474849094567 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8901332825 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.458333333 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247511698461 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699810796997 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760299762788 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150184076953 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355581451734 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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