A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
I mostly disagree with the prompt. In most cases, perpetrators of crime are miscreants. Such person engages in the absolute defiance of the law. Laws as we all know are put in place to help ensure the safety, security and order of a particular region. Anyone who breaks the law by engaging in crime is indirectly aiming at undermining the safety, security and order of the region. If such a person is not striped of his or her civil rights such as the ability to vote, access to social care funded by the taxes of law-abiding citizens e.t.c., then others would see nothing bad in knowingly breaking the law. This further undermining the safety, security and order of that region. Take for example a situation where an individual knowingly commits tax fraud. Such a person is tried and found to be guilty of the crime they have commited. If the civil rights of such an individual is retained despite knowingly commiting the crime, then it would only further encourage others to do same because they know that they will still have their civil rights intact and that they can benefit from their own labour.
However, this is not always the case. An individual may be well aware that they are about to commit crime and still do so. It is not always the case that such a person is trying to break a social contract. There are some situation that warrants that a person has to break a law, thus committing crime inorder to prevent a bad situation from getting worse. This is evident in cases of self-defense and trying to save a fellow citizen whose life is in danger, and saving such a person involves committing a crime. As extreme as this may sound, there are situations that indeed warrants such actions. In a situation where a known serial kidnapper is trying to abduct school kids on their way back from school, a neighbour who is armed tries to prevent such an occurence from happening by firing warning shoots to scare of the kidnappper. The kidnapper ignores the warning shots and proceeds to abduct these school kids, leaving the neighbour no choice than to shoot the kidnapper. In the process, the kidnapper dies and the children escape abduction. Should we then conclude that the neighbour who just murdered the kidnapper and is aware that murder is a crime should not retain the right to any civil rights? I am certain that you will agree that such shouldn't be.
Another example was during the Covid-19 lockdown in Nigeria, government officials decided to lock up palliatives donated by private organisations to be distributed to the masses. Due to a priod of civil unrest that resulted during this period ( the END SARS protest), the masses in their respective region discovered the location of where these palliatives were stored and decided to loot these palliatives since it was supposed to be distributed to them. Looting is a crime punishable by law in Nigeria. Should we then conclude that because the masses commited crime by looting what was rightly theirs, that their civil rights be rescinded from them? Again, the answer is no as this is only oppressing those who were already oppressed.
In conclusion, I do not think that it is of the greater good if people who knowingly commits crime are stripped of their civil right and the right to benefit from their labour.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: situations
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...m certain that you will agree that such shouldnt be. Another example was during the C...
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Suggestion:
... unrest that resulted during this period the END SARS protest, the masses in thei...
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Suggestion: now
...scinded from them? Again, the answer is no as this is only oppressing those who we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2719.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7534965035 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5115381208 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458041958042 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.722399373 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.703703704 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1851851852 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03703703704 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267065689121 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679959254887 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695376346926 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17430304601 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517200584264 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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