more rely on technology will deteriorate people
As the technology improving by leaps and bounds, many people rely on the technology to settle any problems, thus, many people lose their ability to think and to solve the question. Therefore, I agree the statement that the developed technical deteriorate people's ability to thinking.
Since the whole society become an Earth family, more and more information and technical equipment can exchanged from countries to countries that people can easily handle many things when they get block. Although the rapid develop society let our lives more convenience, it cause people less thinking and discussing to solve the problem that will decrease people to arouse their brain to work. Since the Google map help people more convenience when they are driving that they won't see the map carefully to recognize which road they have to go, they just fill the place they want so the application will show and lead them to the place they want.
Even though this prescription will make people's life easier and save much time, it will make people not thinking which road would be better and always listened the navigation to drive the car that make people not thinking. Since the technology still cannot as excellent as human's brain so there might be sometimes wrong when they use the application. So people should also see the road they will drive first and realized the road condition that they can handle anything when they get trouble.
Opponents might argued that the technology just the assist equipment that people still need to think independently so the situation, people rely more and more on technology to settle problems, won't harm the ability of people thinking. However, human will be lazy when they figure out there is a convenience equipment to help them deal with everything. Just like the movie WaLi shows in the cinema, humans won't move by their feet and eat by their hands even don't have to work. They just sit on the chair and being lazy at any time anywhere. The movie just indicated how people rely on the technology. By contrast, when human are trying to solve problems, they will make a group to discuss and trying to find some way to solve it that will let their brains keep working that protect them get harm by too rely on the technology. Also, if people always use their hands instead of technology to make products, it will make their brain keep working to keep from deteriorate.
If the world becomes more convenience and more suitable to human, it will cause human stop thinking and stop to figure the method to settle the problem as the
above mentioned. Hence, I agree the argument that people more rely on the technical will deteriorate their ability more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...iety let our lives more convenience, it cause people less thinking and discussing to ...
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Line 2, column 304, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'discussing solving'.
Suggestion: discussing solving
...ence, it cause people less thinking and discussing to solve the problem that will decrease people t...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the car that make people not thinking. Since the technology still cannot as excellen...
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Line 4, column 457, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... their feet and eat by their hands even dont have to work. They just sit on the chai...
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Line 4, column 798, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to rely'?
Suggestion: to rely
...p working that protect them get harm by too rely on the technology. Also, if people alwa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84531590414 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38915089857 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43137254902 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4663433919 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.823529412 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430690744481 0.243740707755 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158830273339 0.0831039109588 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127127038683 0.0758088955206 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267126866705 0.150359130593 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10618535607 0.0667264976115 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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