The president suggests that the school of all-female should admit males to enhance the school’s profit and enrollments. However, the alumnae disagree with the president’s assumption that continuing the school of all-female is a better solution. To assess those prescriptions efficacy, some questions need to answer more detail and more convincing.
Since the other all-female college adopting coeducation, have male and female to study together, very successful. The president of Grove College thought the prescription and increasing the school’s enrollment. However, change a school from all-female to coeducation needs myriads of money and time to engage in that the prescription needs to be comprehensive. Although there is a successful experiment shows the assumption might feasible, there also have many differences between the college and the Grove. Such as the location might be a very main cause to determine whether the prescription will success. The college, transfer to coeducation successfully, might locate in the center of the town that they can admit many males to enroll their school. By contrast, the Grove might locate at the suburb that a coeducation college probably not appeal to students to enroll.
By contrast, the alumnae refuse the president’s idea and thought the college should maintain all-female because the all-female status is the primary reason to appeal student to enrollment. However, the alumnae need to show more evidence to prove their prescription. Is it the truth that the all-female college is a primitive reason? Maybe this strategy makes more student decline their willingness to enroll in the Grove. Besides, is the alumnae can be the whole faculties’ opinion? Faculties might more appreciate the situation of the school, they probably know which prescription is better than the alternative one. Hence, the alumnae should answer the question and take more detail to strengthen their prescriptions.
Also, the school needs money to publicize the Groove to appeal to more students to enroll, regardless of only female or both male and female. The Grove needs to publicize if the president transfers the college from all-female to coeducation so that male students will know this message to enroll the Grove. The alumnae might open more special classes which are suitable for female, if the alumnae thought the primacy reason for their school is all-female, they should publicize their advantage to allow more students to enroll. However, the above prescriptions all need money to achieve. But where is their money come from? So not only the president of the alumnae should enact series proposals to let the college earn money so that they can approve their prescription in more strategy to strengthen their argument.
To make the article more convincing, the author must address the above questions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 2055 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.709 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.607 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33417721519 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84262652433 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450632911392 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.608808423 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.333333333 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274634301171 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893514263645 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730760517385 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162633820145 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948176004414 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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