A nation should require all of it students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position y

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A nation should require all of it students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position

The topic raises the controversial issue of whether or not all students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Indisputably, for a handful of brilliant students who happens to find their utmost passion in the early stage of their lives, for them it might the case that they want more focus in a more specific field of study. Nevertheless, the majority of students in a country happens to go to schools to widen their knowledge because they have a very limited exposure to the world. Thus, I generally agree with the opinion that students should follow the same national curriculum until they enter college.

First of all, an elementary level of understanding of everything is really necessary for anyone to live. I would like to point out that the schools are only place where the students get to know about various subjects at least at very surface level, and these understandings serve well in day-to-day live. To illustrate this, let us look at an example of a literature student who does not know mathematics wants to buy a book. In this circumstance, as she does not know how to add or substract would obviously fail to do a simple task. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that a common well thought out curriculum is needed for every students.

Furthermore, if all the students were pushed to study in a narrow field in the early stage of their lives, this can lead to widespread apathy in study. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that, as we get acquiented with various subjects in school, we develope a personal interest towards a subject. if there were no national curriculum in the school, then the students would not have get exposure to all these subjects and would not have develope a personal interest towards a field. Hence, all evidence demonstrates that a national level curriculum is necessary.

Admittedly, in some cases a national curriculum might not needed. this is true especially when it comes to some few students who have grown a interest in specific field and would not like to focus on everything. However the above argument does not constitute a firm support of the claim that a national level curriculum is not needed.

In conclusion, although it might be that some students can avoid the general curriculum, but for majority of students it is a valuable asset to live their life smoothly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, then, thus, well, at least, in conclusion, first of all, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91604938272 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76837806049 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483950617284 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4271260669 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.117647059 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.47058823529 5.21951772744 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230328251601 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913759780565 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102629579967 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128559629253 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895074741897 0.0667264976115 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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