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The business manager suggest that the late-night news time has increased at the detriment of weather news and suggests that the resultant effect is the advertisers not renewing their contract and complaints received from viewers were weather related cases. More so, he suggested that the time for weather should be restored.
I find this argument unpersuasive on various grounds.
Firstly, the manager suddenly came into conclusion that the shift in time-table led to viewers complaining. this point is not solid/robust enough because the content of the complaint might not be regarded to the time shift ot constraints. The speaker did not explicitly state the main purpose for complaints. Who knows maybe the quality of delivery had reduced which happens to be a technical issue which doesn't have anything to do with the time. It might be that the weather report is becoming inaccurate and viewers felt like complaining.
More so, the speaker linked advertisement contract expiration which in the long run had effect on revenue. this is not clear as well because there might be various reasons for advertising companies not to advertise again. For instance, a company might be complacent after a target had been met. Another instance is if there is another television station offering a wider range of coverage, more viewer base and low price. The manager needs to research on this to know why these companies are not renewing the contracts.
Another point is the complaints as regards local news coverage is not clear as well. the manager need to research on type of complaints as regards local news. It might be the station's journalists are not efficient enough in gathering local news and this does not have anything to do with the time in which the news is reported. Secondly, may be the station reports stale news and as it is expected, television stations should be news breaker.
Finally, the manager assumes returning to previous time-table would bring more viewers. It is noteworthy, that it was not stated that there was decrease in the number of viewers initially. This indicates that shifting the time-table might not necessarily increase or reduce the viewers of the television station.
In summary, the manager need to provide information on type of complaints by the viewers, further research on reasons advertisers are not renewing their contract. Maybe there is a new television station. The manager needs to produce information on the database of viewers to know if there is increase or decrease and maybe the change is in correlation with shift in time-table.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... time-table led to viewers complaining. this point is not solid/robust enough becaus...
^^^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... state the main purpose for complaints. Who knows maybe the quality of delivery had...
^^^
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...h happens to be a technical issue which doesnt have anything to do with the time. It m...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... in the long run had effect on revenue. this is not clear as well because there migh...
^^^^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...cal news coverage is not clear as well. the manager need to research on type of com...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as regards, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11820330969 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76799343143 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456264775414 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2506526802 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1304347826 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00851399100043 0.243740707755 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00307848832395 0.0831039109588 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0101466406268 0.0758088955206 13% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00435745974193 0.150359130593 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00701721288188 0.0667264976115 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... time-table led to viewers complaining. this point is not solid/robust enough becaus...
^^^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... state the main purpose for complaints. Who knows maybe the quality of delivery had...
^^^
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...h happens to be a technical issue which doesnt have anything to do with the time. It m...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... in the long run had effect on revenue. this is not clear as well because there migh...
^^^^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...cal news coverage is not clear as well. the manager need to research on type of com...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as regards, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11820330969 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76799343143 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456264775414 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2506526802 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1304347826 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00851399100043 0.243740707755 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00307848832395 0.0831039109588 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0101466406268 0.0758088955206 13% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00435745974193 0.150359130593 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00701721288188 0.0667264976115 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.