“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they
enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the
recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples
shape your position.
Students form an important part of the future of a nation and the quality of education provided to them by the nation is fundamental to its growth and advancements in the future. Majority of the developed nations have high literacy rates (~80%) which facilitate their advancements in various fields ranging from technological advancements to providing a high standard of living to all its citizens. I agree that students should be required to study the same curriculum till a certain stage but it should not be a compulsory thrust onto them and it should be left to their interests as to what they should be allowed to pursue further in their lives. For example, if a child likes science and wants to pursue a career in the same, then he/she should not be forced to study subjects like languages which he/she may not like.
Till the students are in middle schools they should be taught the same curriculum and they should give equal focus on each subject which will help them in selecting a career of their liking. This will ensure that they have a chance to study all the subjects in the curriculum and it will broaden their thinking ability and help them transform into intelligent adults. Parents should be made an integral part of this teaching-learning process as they are the biggest influencers of a child and hence, if they can help the child give equal importance to all the subjects then he/she will be able to select a good career ahead.
A common curriculum will also streamline the training which a person undertakes to become a teacher. If the curriculum is the same, then the teachers will have to study only that parts and their training time will get short. One potential flaw which this system can present is that, if the curriculum is not updated from time to time, then the students will not be updated about the latest trends in the subjects and will be at a disadvantage when they are exposed to the professional side. One example of this can be observed in the engineering syllabus in some developing countries, if the industry has upgraded and students are unaware then they take some time to grasp the changes when they join the industry.
To conclude, this is a very good initiative to provide an equal quality of education to all the students across the nation and the only care which should be taken is to update the database as and when required
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... integral part of this teaching-learning process as they are the biggest influenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69784172662 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60151949112 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438848920863 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7860265741 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.25 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.75 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225721784853 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992065978212 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391450108803 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154721200548 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453962286152 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.