A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
In India, we have the same curriculum for everyone until they enter college. I have seen the curriculum my entire life, and I think this has so many flaws. In this 21st century, there is so much to do and we can't just ask everyone to do the same thing as we are doing for generations.
In the curriculum, there are basic subjects which can be compulsory for all the students, as these are necessary for general basic knowledge. All students should study subjects like Maths, Science, Language subjects, as these are the basic necessities. But, we can't evaluate everyone based on the same performance measure scale. We can't evaluate the fish and the bird on the same scale. They have different abilities, we can't ask fish to fly in the sky and, we just can't simply tell the bird to dive and swim into an ocean. As we can see that different abilities can't be measured on the same scale. If we ask someone who is excellent in Maths to go and you will only study Biology, as this is compulsory and we are stereotypical. Will he be able to get success in his life? No! He likes Maths, why would he study Biology if, it doesn't interest him.
Giving everyone the same thing to study is simply going to suppress their passion. One will not get any chance to self better. He will not get to see what he is capable of doing. What he can do and how far he can go. Though in Highschool, children are not enough matured to decide what he or she wants. But giving them chance to choose between their subjects will improve their abilities of what they are good at. Forcing to study the same subjects will not even take them to better grades. If they are learning what they love they will definitely study it by burning the midnight oil, and I think this surely will help them in their betterment of the future. At the school level, every student should be evaluated separately, this will help to understand their caliber and shape their future. Adopting this change in curriculum will benefit students as well as teachers, as they won't have to force the children to study. Because they will do it on their own because they like it.
Giving students independence of choosing their own curriculum will definitely going to help for their bright and sustaining future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ng their own curriculum will definitely going to help for their bright and sustaining...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53676470588 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40606766749 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463235294118 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2868347338 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.125 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.58333333333 5.21951772744 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18018691787 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586087489889 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556517301481 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107571065022 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262437663286 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.1392134831 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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