As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of
humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
In recent years, there has been tremendous development in technology. The human race has developed so much, in order to make lives better. We are surrounded by technology, we start our day with the simple alarm clock, which we have replaced with the alarms on smartphones. Technological advancements in all fields have helped us to illuminate almost all the parts of our world. Buy, according to the author, people are relying on technology so much that, it is deteriorating the abilities to think and, I do not agree with the statement. Which I will elaborate on in the following passages.
Firstly, this is a golden era for all the advancements in technology. We all depend on technology almost for all of our problems. Right from waking up in the morning with an alarm clock, making our coffee with a coffee machine, driving to work or school. Each and every aspect of human life is influenced by technology but, surely this is not affecting the ability to think. For an instance, we use calculators to perform calculations, though using calculators has hampered our ability to perform simple calculations but, this does not mean that we have lost this ability. Moreover, using calculators has spared us plenty of time to think about other problems and solve them. This extra time, we can utilize to learn other things, to analyze other problems.
Secondly, technology has illuminated many problems, this helps us to study other problems more effectively. However, depending on machines not only gives fast results but also more accurate than humans. One can rely on technology for better results and sustaining performance. Although, using technology has made some of us lazy but, this has not affected us to go crazy over technology. Depending on technology only has made us creative only. For example, our mobile phones, we use it like it is one of our body parts, some of us even cannot live without it. Mobiles came and, many doors of opportunities opened for us like social media, blogs, internet. Using cameras of our mobile we can, not only click pictures but also inspire others by uploading to social media. However, the only thing we should be cautious about and which in deteriorating the minds of youngsters is that, the wrong information provided on the internet.
To sum up, I will surely disagree with the statement, as I have elaborated in the above paragraphs, technology has made lives better and it is not deteriorating our abilities to think.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 539, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and, I do not agree with the statement. Which I will elaborate on in the following pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95192307692 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8256799988 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514423076923 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1533266373 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5652173913 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0869565217 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236243262926 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689385526163 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681888279683 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150540198337 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300459133614 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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