"A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A country’s national curriculum has been and will remain a subject of scrutiny and debate. The prompt suggests that a nation should require all of their students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. I mostly disagree with this for two reasons.
Students studying the same national curriculum can simultaneously be advantageous and disadvantageous. Starting with its pros. Studying the same national curriculum will promote some kind of unity, cooperation, and brotherhood amongst the students. Since they will learn the same subjects, it allows students who share the same interests to bond and learn or exchange ideas or concepts. This helps to fosters bonds all over the country that may be later beneficial to the society in years to come. For instance, consider the many giant tech companies in the US today. Apple Inc. was founded by Steve Jobs and Steve Wozniak who were friends in high school even before college. And guess what? Both of them dropped out of college! So if they had had a flexible curriculum, it’s possible we wouldn’t have some of the greatest tech inventions of today.
On the other hand, a nation having the same national curriculum can narrow the thinking, perspectives, scopes, or views of its students. Why is that? Having a broad or diverse curriculum allows students to study beyond what just interests them, it allows them to think outside the box or learn skills that may come in handy for them in the future. For example, consider students who had access to vocational skills as part of their curriculum. Such students can learn to build with their hands by making boxes, chairs, and other cool stuff. Even if such student weren’t interested in vocational studies, they will be equipped with a set of skills they will find useful forever. In the same way, having a uniform national curriculum may hamper the natural talents of students. For example, say there’s a precocious kid interested in painting, but whose school curriculum is limited to the sciences alone. This may limit the child, as he/she will not have the opportunity to nurture their interests, and we all know what happens when a plant is not watered sufficiently. Not studying the same curriculum also allows some kind of diversity in graduates produced by high school. This is somewhat beneficial to the society because waiting for students to study diverse or different courses in college may not work, as not all students will go to college. So whatever they learnt in middle or high school is what they contribute in building the society.
In conclusion, studying the same national curriculum or otherwise, has its pros and cons, and it’s difficult to heavily lean towards either. I would suggest each country to keep an open mind, and weigh the pros and cons of having the same national curriculum before enforcing such a decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'foster'.
Suggestion: foster
...change ideas or concepts. This helps to fosters bonds all over the country that may be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02713987474 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67790694773 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492693110647 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4662318484 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6153846154 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4230769231 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290287875348 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849136380684 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784236490432 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221576377958 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815319792899 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.