'A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.'
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
A student is nurtured and made ready to pursue higher education in his/her school years. The more versatile the school curriculum, the more character development the student witnesses. The prompt suggests that all schools across a country should follow the same curriculum, or, in other words, every student before entering college (where he/she pursues a major), should be exposed to the same curriculum. I strongly agree with this statement for two reasons.
When starting college, students coming from different backgrounds have a varied range of skills and knowledge, and this might give some of them an undue advantage. For example, if some school curriculum constitutes computer programming, the students who have already been exposed to it, have worked with computers, and are comparatively at a better position than people who have no inkling about programming, have an upper hand. If, as a part of their college degree, students are required to take up a programming course, the ones who have better skills at it (as a result of programming being a part of their school curriculum) may score better grades, much to the loss of others. This demonstrates how higher education, transcripts, and thus future careers of students can be affected because some might have an unfair advantage of having more knowledge over others.
Nation-wide exams where a copius amount of students are graded based on their performance in the same examinations and admissions to colleges are based on the scores, might also prove to be partial. For instance, the Joint Engineering Entrance (JEE) examination in India which is the entrace test all the students aspiring to take admissions in engineering colleges have to take, where on an average 1 million students show up. Here, students who were taught science/ mathematics earlier or of an advanced level might again have an advantage over the ones who weren't. Admissions on the basis of the scores of this test might thus not be fair as not all students appearing for it had the same foundational knowledge. This illustrates how, due to non-uniform teaching across the country, the time a student is taught a subject or the level of complexity he is exposed to is again varied and this might not lead to an evenhanded admission system.
Although some might argue that countries where there are a plethora of languages spoken, where there are multiple cultures that are markedly different from each other in many respects, students should learn their mother tongue and be fluent in the language, this can be taken care of by the flexibility of choosing 'which' language course the school/ state wishes to opt for. The rest of the curriculum, however, consisting of subjects like mathematics, science, writing or character development, should be taught uniformly across the nation, so that anyone who has the right to education is at par with others, regardless of their their gender or relilgion or the region they are from. This would ensure all the applicants to be at the same level while applying for college owing to paralled exposure in their school years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09215686275 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74509033612 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511764705882 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.671765891 60.3974514979 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.3125 118.986275619 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.875 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187278718496 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06874575888 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427597817728 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125776564596 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371557023084 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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