A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your positio

While a nation's potential to excel in the future depends on the education of its youth, there have been many steps taken by the government of numerous nations in this direction. The prompt states that a government should make it mandatory to make a uniform curriculum of every school in the country until the students enter in their college. I strongly agree with the prompt because of the two reasons.

Firstly, students entering the college will be at the same page in context of the knowledge that has been provided to them. In the current scenario, it is often experienced that students from different schools have varied knowledge depending on how high their school fees was or what stature of school they were in. This causes some students to shy away and lose their confidence when they enter into the college. For instance, if a girl is brilliant in grasping new information and understanding science, but she has been in some small school owing to the economic background of the family, this school would not provide enough resources for the girl to excel. Then entering into the college, she sees people knowing a lot of new things than her. This would hurt her confidence and thus resulting into diffidence and introversy. The example conveys that if the cirriculum would be uniform, the level of knowledge would not depend on the economic background or type of school a student was in, but would depend upon the student's ability of understanding the things.

Even if the cirriculum is same everywhere, one can definitely take tuitions or extra classes of extra-cirriculur things. Thus, if a student has recognized his or her passion very early in life, there is no stopping them to attend a few extra class and develop their interest in that field. For example, a boy has figured out that he wants to become a doctor when he is in the seventh grade and to get into a good medical school, he has to clear an examination in two years, he is completely free to join a class that teaches him medical subjects apart from the school cirriculum. Or if someone has a fascination towards music that has been recognized precociously, he or she can join a music class that would teach them the instruments they want. However, there will be some knowledge they would get from the school apart from that passion, thus increasing literacy and the quality of youth. Thus, this policy completely supports the education of the nation and would lead to glorious results.

Some people might argue that if a child is really interested in playing football, what is the point of her studying the same tedious cirriculum as some other studnet who wants to become a scientist? However, isn't increasing the level and quality of youth the main aim of any nation? There is no harm in a sportsperson being intellectual about science or history, it will only benefit them. Thus, the government should employ this scheme keeping in mind that are all kinds of students in a nation and the cirriculum should not be too hard or too easy for them.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1021, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...udent was in, but would depend upon the students ability of understanding the things. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...o wants to become a scientist? However, isnt increasing the level and quality of you...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, then, thus, while, apart from, as to, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76996197719 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62242838816 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48288973384 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0685233712 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.45 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139455637658 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463278527031 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374450743976 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099596452761 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441843508679 0.0667264976115 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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