A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
This sentence recomends the curriculum for students of a nation before they enter college. Eventhough it might sound harsh and forceful, but this recomendation may be for studens own benefits. Students before they get to college, they are normally under the age of 18, the age when people reach the legal age and be considered as an independent individual. Young adults before this age are mainly not able to decide logiacally in important and critical situations. This fact has a biological background and that is, humans before age 18 have not developed fully their frontal cortexes, a part in the brain responsible to control the emotions. This may affect alot of aspects of persons life when it depends on their ability to decide critically. So if students under this age will be on their own to decide for their curriculum, their decesion might be corrupted with emotion and choises that they might regret years later in their lives.
The material taught in schools before college, is normally the general knowledge that every has to know in their lives in 21st century. It can be as simple as solveing a basic math problem in counting money when you go shopping. We all know that math is not always the favorite subject for students. If there is no national curriculum that does not force students to take the math courses, a considerable number of students might refuse to take this course and deprive themselves from a knowledge they need in their everyday life, even if does not seem so at the first look. This issue can be disscused for any other basic subjects such as chemistry. Chemistry knowledge help people to familiarize with the substances around them every day, for example the cleaning liquids and deterjant, one must know the danger of these materials or when they are not suppose to combine some them together. Eventhough it might seem that person can get this information from their parents when they grow up, but we should consider everybodey do not have the same situation at their homes and this is the educational institutions responsibility to prepare them for real life and fill the gaps that are not filled at their homes.
The other issue, is that if there is no national curiculum for students in a country, it is up to the people in their region or the school staff to decide for the curriculum. In this condition we can not make sure that there is equity for all the students and the curriculums can be prone to errors and problems.
I general, based the issues explained above, it is more advantagous for students and the future society, if everybody get the essential informations before they get to the legal age and after that age they would be able to decide what path is better for them to take.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding substances'?
Suggestion: the surrounding substances
...owledge help people to familiarize with the substances around them every day, for example the cleaning liq...
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Line 5, column 855, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
...of these materials or when they are not suppose to combine some them together. Eventhou...
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Line 5, column 1102, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'institutions'' or 'institution's'?
Suggestion: institutions'; institution's
...their homes and this is the educational institutions responsibility to prepare them for real...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78571428571 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58438116813 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1465396533 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152657262965 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587498869242 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760879262886 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107850959358 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336982714413 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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