The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Hope and encouragement are two important factors for a success. Encouragement received from others keep the fire of hope on inside humans to go forward, but with all the positive and essential aspect of encouraging people, it is necessary to remind them of their deficits. Sometimes people are not aware of their mistake and it is the responsibility of the friends or more importantly the educational institution to remind them their shortcomings and help them to improve.
A teacher in the class has a good opinion about the performance of the students. For example, in a math course, the teacher knows a student have problems to understand on syllabus of the course while they are doing well in other parts. teacher must acknowledge and praise the ability of student to encourage them, but it is necessary to tell them about their problem with the specific part. If they do not remind them, student probably would never know about this, has fallacious high expection of herself/himsels, and on the exam, he/she definitely would not able to perform well the part she had problem to understand. This eventually leads to disappointment of the student and make them feel they are not capable enough while they were thinking they are doing well. However, this issue would have been prevented easily if at the first place the teacher helped them improve themselves.
A example on the math course, might be the most simple one because the fact to ignore the negative actions can have much worse consequences. A parent are first to teach their children the propriety. Even though most of parents tend to praise their children and of course they do it out of love and attention for them, sometimes they might ignore to let them know of their wrong doings. For example, a small kid might say something inappropriate in front of his/her parent, and the their reaction is laughing. Certainly in this situation this kid, completely unaware about what he/she said, imaging his/her saying to be something funny. This kid eventually goes out and someday say the samething in front of his/her friends or adults and they blame him for him/hers not behaving. Not only the kid face a paradox from his parent side and the reaction of others, he/she goes into more confusion or even anger about the situation. Again, this situation could have been rolled out easily of the parents did not laugh and reminded the kid about the inappropriate words.
In general, it is very important to let the people know about their wrong doings so would be able to improve themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Teacher
...ile they are doing well in other parts. teacher must acknowledge and praise the ability...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...er helped them improve themselves. A example on the math course, might be th...
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Line 9, column 151, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... have much worse consequences. A parent are first to teach their children the propr...
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Line 9, column 212, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...eir children the propriety. Even though most of parents tend to praise their children and of co...
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Line 9, column 478, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...opriate in front of his/her parent, and the their reaction is laughing. Certainly in this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in general, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.3162921348 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90783410138 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66408475388 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479262672811 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0126182583 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.333333333 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.048679325734 0.243740707755 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185314769062 0.0831039109588 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0197124466087 0.0758088955206 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0276745415968 0.150359130593 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203566839516 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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