a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
How much a nation is good to, and has the right to interfere with the details of education in different parts of its society. Should it have a detailed program for every subjects of study and enforce it to the whole nation, regardless of the differences and disparaties in different communities of that society?
Nations all around the globe are not the same. some are small societies of the same ethnicity and background talking the same language such as Nepal or Singapure. There are some other countries with huge lands and with people of different races and ethnicities, having different religions and talking different languages. India, Indonesia or Iran are examples of such countries. people in these countries have different interests and for sure they would like to keep their identity and they have the right to do so. forcing the whole nation to study the same curriculum, the same language, or the same code of conduct to all this diversity without considering disparaties will lead to stepping over rights and the freedom of these people. this is what is happening in a country such as Iran. although the majority of people are of persian ethnicity of Shiite sect of Islam and talking Farsi as their language, there is many other minorities of Turkics, Arabs, Baluchs and Kurds which practice different customs, speaks different languages and have their own interests. Ignoring all these is violating their basic human rights.
Furthormore, different parts of a country have different geogrophical and environmental specificities. Student graduates should learn how to live and come along with the peculiar situation of their envornment which people in other parts of the country may not experience or not even know about it. teaching about these in college is beneficial but is not enough because there are so many student that won't continue their studies into college or beyong . these young people should learn how to cope with their own situation. compare living in rocky mountain ranges of Colorado, dry deserts of New Mexico or tropic climates of Florida. Do they not have to learn about the basics they need for living in these disparate climates.
On the other hand students have different aptitudes. they have different abilities to learn different subject. At the same time they might not have the interest or ability to progress in other fields. All these are reasons to conclude that the same national curriculem is a hinder which impedes the ideal progression of people from different ethnic or language background and living in different geographcal conditions. this will violate peoples rights and cause dissatisfaction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14351851852 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70773376342 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493055555556 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.7647363492 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217045888133 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721417204168 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076635094868 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143698135571 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192143080527 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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