A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
The curriculum which the students study in their school is the base upon which they are going to build up a foundation after graduating from the school. Moreover, it is this curriculum only which helps and guides the students for their future. The prompt states that all the students to study the same curriculum before entering college. However, I strongly disagree with this opinion and believe that students should be taught the specific courses on which they want to specialize in future of the course which they would like to pursue in college. I support my view with the following three reasons:
First of all, all the students have different interests and different views of what field they want to pursue in future or after graduating from school. It is very much likely that some of the students have much affinity towards science while some might seem science to be an arrantly boring subject but might have strong proclivity towards sports. Thus, teaching science in-depth to those students will not be beneficial for the students as well as school, since these students will find it difficult to score well in the subject, eventually scoring low grades. Moreover, this can even create frustration in the students, leading them to even quit their education. Graduating from school is the most common degree required by many professions such as colleges and companies, it is very important that student get to study the matter which interests them.
Secondly, different students have different potentials. If all schools in the country have the same curriculum irrespective of the types of students, then it might be difficult for some of the students to cope up with the rest of the students. Students have different learning rate such that some students might find quadratic equations much easier even if they are in fifth grade only, while some might get the complete grasp of it when reached seventh or eighth grade. Thus, if these students are taught the same syllabus, it is very much likely that some of the students might not be able to get the complete hold of the subject leading them to perform inferiorly than others.In addition, this will eventually lead to lowering the self-esteem of the students due to which they might not be able to socialize with other students of the class thinking he/she is not as smart as them. Thus it is very important for the schools to set up the curriculum on the basis of potentials of the students as everyone has their own pace of learning new things.
Finally, if all the students are taught the same curriculum, it might lead to hampering the creativity of the students. As already discussed, everyone have their own interests. Thus, if everyone is taught the same thing, the students who might have might creative in other fields might not get to reveal his hidden talent because of the lack of teaching in that subject. For example, there are so many cases that people in differetn profession doing well in others. For an instance, Brett Lee is an average Cricket player from Australia. But, it is seen that, he has a very good vocals and he can sing very well such that he can even be a professional singer if train a bit in that field. Thus, if the school in which he was studying would have identified his talent at that time such that allowing him to practice more of his own interest, he would have been a much better singer than he is a cricketer right now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78282828283 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47598917519 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425925925926 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.4386769865 60.3974514979 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.285714286 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192765941472 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745444015084 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652776617321 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150283349973 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944292870571 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.