Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty
In the article mentioned above, the author states that Adams Realty is superior in real estate business as compared to Fitch Realty. The author has come to this conclusion based on the quick sales of the home done by Adams along with generating more averaged revenues than Fitch’s. However, before coming to this conclusion, three questions must be answered.
First of all, does having a greater number of agents manifest the success of a firm? In other words, can the ability and superiority of a firm be attributed to the number of employees working over there? It is very much likely that, although with less employees or agents, Fitch Realty might have the more hard working and diligent people as compared to Adams. The number of employees does not signify success as success of a firm depends upon the quality of work and dedication of the employees. Further, another possibility is that the average number of sales done per employee in Fitch be more as compared to the Adams such that Fitch might have sold less houses in total, but the number sold by per employee is more than Adams. If either of these scenarios had merit, then the conclusion drawn by the article is highly weakened.
Second of all, the author posits that high average sales of a company are directly related to the superiority of it. It can be the case that the price of the houses sold by Adams was much higher as compared to the Fitch- which might have only low cost houses to be sold, thus making low average sales of the firm. It can most probably be that the number of houses sold by Fitch be more than the Adams but since the cost of the houses sold by Fitch can be very much low as compared to Fitch, its average revenue remained lower. If any of these cases hold water, then the conclusion drawn by the author is weakened.
Finally, the author claims that the time taken by Fitch was more to sell his house as compared to the Adams- which took significantly less time than Fitch. The author has assumed that selling a house in less time shows the superiority of a firm. But, it can be the case that the house given to the Fitch was not that attractive or it might have many faults and the house given to the Adams was in very good condition due to which many people might have opted to buy it. It is also possible that the house sold by Adams was in a very good locality with easy transport to all the essential parts of the city like hospitals, schools, etc. Thus, if any of these cases holds water, the claim made by the author is weakned.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2021 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.356 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.16 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun employees is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...is very much likely that, although with less employees or agents, Fitch Realty might...
^^^^
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ales done per employee in Fitch be more as compared to the Adams such that Fitch m...
^^
Line 3, column 655, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun houses is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e Adams such that Fitch might have sold less houses in total, but the number sold by...
^^^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...he houses sold by Adams was much higher as compared to the Fitch- which might have...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47629310345 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24897482094 2.78398813304 81% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411637931034 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6065071896 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.388888889 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230683752792 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802016196238 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794463499815 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161746677911 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515392254445 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 12.5979740519 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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