A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
These days, the issue of the education is one of the most important concerns of societies. Students shape the future of the society and have a great impact on societies' success. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among academician as to whether all students in different areas should be nurtured with the same curriculum or their syllabuses should depend on the situation. I personally, concur with the former. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, forming a unique and nationwide curriculum is economical in terms of money and time. If each area requires to define a specific curriculum, a great deal of money have to spend on defining a program, as opposed to the situation when all schools are required to obey a particular curriculum because they do not need to allocate lots of money to consultants in order to writing a schedule. Therefore, they can spend this budget on other fields such as building libraries, laboratories, and gyms to name but a few. They can even reduce the school's tuition. By doing so, they help families who cannot afford the educational expenses of their children.
Second of all, I think assigning a unique curriculum to all students in the whole country is fair. In other words, all human beings are equal and they must have the same conditions and exploit the same services. By allocating the same curriculum to all country's students, equality can be seen and every person in society is satisfied with government. For example, if students in big cities have better conditions and programs than rural students, entrance exams for entering colleges cannot be logical and choosing students based on these exams is not fair.
All in all, I really believe that defining a nationwide curriculum for students seem logical and fair on the ground that it saves a lot of money for schools and it is fair.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'societies'' or 'society's'?
Suggestion: societies'; society's
... the society and have a great impact on societies success. In this regard, there is a lon...
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...g-standing discussion among academician as to whether all students in different areas should ...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'defining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: defining
...f money and time. If each area requires to define a specific curriculum, a great deal of ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ame but a few. They can even reduce the schools tuition. By doing so, they help familie...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot of money for schools and it is fair.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i think, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94409937888 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76736479989 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537267080745 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3411052491 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.133333333 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196644356263 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625994440439 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443283236122 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120511643443 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215611989523 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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