A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college

The given argument is flawed in numerous ways. the argument is based of some unwarranted assumptions . The business manager assumes that the of number viewers have reduced because their program devotes more time to the national news and less time to weather and local news, and many such assumptions are made with no certain proof or explanation.

The claim made by the manager states that most of the complaints received by them were about their coverage in weather and local news but he does not mention the amount of complaints received by the viewers .It could be that the total number of complaints might have reduced and the ratio of the local and weather news related complaints are more. for instance if the company used to receive 50 complain among which 20 were about the local news and weather and now the total complaints could be 30 among which only 10 are local news related then the argument will completely fall apart.

Further the manager also assumes that the advertising contracts are being cancelled because of the amount of time devoted to the national and local news ,but provides no proof of this being the reason . the advertising company might have cancelled because of the increase in the news channel companies prices to broadcast their ads or may be they might not want to advertise on te news channel at all. the argument would have been stronger if the manager would the advertising agencies and their requirements .

The manager also makes various unexplained assumptions about the attracting the viewer and not losing the revenue generated from the advertisement agencies. If he would have mentioned the overall feedback of the viewers and their preference related to the time allocation the assumptions would be more stronger.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02721088435 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55899787236 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465986394558 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.116932912 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.8 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0483174843081 0.218282227539 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201295640012 0.0743258471296 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0221872596039 0.0701772020484 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0306403865535 0.128457276422 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280278322096 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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