A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how those examples shape your position.
THe author asserts that student must study same national curriculum until they enter college. It sounds reasonable in some respects because it can gives student oppertunity to have basic knowledge and learn application of one field knowledge to another field, but it is not always true because there's an special case.
Formal education before entering college is necessary most of student becuase there's lots of things student need to know commonly like public law and basic math and history for modern life. Without thse basic knowledge, after being part of the society, they feel uncomfortable becuase they're the only person who doesn't know about these knowledge. Moreover, students needed to find their interest by experencing variety of courses like art, music, athletics. By doing these activities they can find their interest for future job
Furthermore, lots of field of research have blurred their boarder with other field of study because one field have greate impact on the other field. So interdisciplinary is the one of the required skill in these days. For example, in the field of state of the art technologe artificial intelligent is radically developed when Convolutional Neural Network was invented by professor Geoffry Hinton in University of Toronto. This network is the result of combination - Convolution filter of image processing field and Neural Network of artificial intelligent field. Student might learn how to apply one knowledge for other part of study by learning variety of study with formal education.
However, there's an exception for some students who are extraoridnary in some special field especially like physics and mathmatics. They need to concentrate specific field when they are young for develope their ability when they have best performance physically and mentally. For example, many historically great scientist develope their theory before their age of 30. Great scientist, mathmatician and phillosophy Isac Newton was also insperated the Principia which is fundamental of physics when he was young. Thus, it is important to study special field for genius. For them, it might waste of time to being formally educatied.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...able becuase theyre the only person who doesnt know about these knowledge. Moreover, s...
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...e the only person who doesnt know about these knowledge. Moreover, students needed to find thei...
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...ng for develope their ability when they have best performance physically and mentally. Fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, for example, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42182890855 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77182437767 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560471976401 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3745152126 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.875 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153190573771 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592866784906 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743339113303 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100877587873 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440723364725 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.