The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author asserts that best indication of a great nation is by the general welfare of its people, not by the achievements of its experts like rulers, artists or scientist. Some people may agree with the author because general welfare make people happy and it can be the most important standard to evaluate a great nation. However, we can consider what is more important factor evaluating great nation after defining the term ‘a great nation’. If we define a great nation as country where many people feel happy, then welfare can be the best factor to make a great nation. In other case, if a great nation is defined as country with great ability devoting development of humanity in many field.
Admittedly, the author’s assertion that general welfare is important standards to evaluate one country as a great nation might hold true under certain circumstances. For example, North Europe countries which welfare of its people is in the best condition are considered as great country from many other countries. Many people admire these countries for their great welfare like well-established education system and good medical system. Accordingly, based on above reasons and examples, the author’s claim can be agreed to a certain degree.
However, the author’s assertion may not always be warranted in all aspects. A great country with leading development in many field. For example, Rome was great country having great impact on many other country after the era of Roman Empire. This country make basis of law, politics, architecture, military, and even engineering. Without Roman Empire, Mankind have never been developed in recently. Thus, achievement of rulers, scientists and artists can be the one of factor consider if one country is great country.
In sum, the factors to evaluate which nation is a great nation are depended on definition of term ‘a great nation’. Therefore, both a country which have great welfare aspiring other country and also a country which achievement of their rulers, scientists, artists have great impact on development of humanity can be a great nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fields'.
Suggestion: many fields
...ity devoting development of humanity in many field. Admittedly, the author's asserti...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fields'.
Suggestion: many fields
...eat country with leading development in many field. For example, Rome was great country ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25882352941 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82487712934 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8583622704 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.176470588 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231538366685 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935610589343 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810065172359 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168311246017 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735647266194 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.